Re: Could somebody check my FCE-preparation essay, please? Hi,
In my opinion, your technical writing is very good, but about ideas that you do not use transition much. Your assay is a kind of comparation, so you use some trasistion: in contrast, otherwise, in opposite . . . .
" If you are a lazy guy, you won’t prefer to read any newspaper, you will get your information through the TV."
In this sentence, I think if you put "but" between ". . . newspaper, but you will . . ." your idea much be clearer.
Next paragraph, I don't need "but". just write "There are many differences . ."
That all I have, Good luck |