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[nur]

Whoops.. Yup, there's a repetition there. Thanks for pointing it out.

Ok, yea, I think "An example of this rule" sounds better. But does the underlined part sound okay? "An epitome of this rule was when the members had to slide down a very steep gradient at Padnunok, Lamunin."

[RonBee]

Whoops.. Yup, there's a repetition there. Thanks for pointing it out.

Ok, yea, I think "An example of this rule" sounds better. But does the underlined part sound okay? "An epitome of this rule was when the members had to slide down a very steep gradient at Padnunok, Lamunin."

Yes, that's OK.

[nur]

Ok, thanks for the help.

How about this one?

Not only does trekking build one’s physical stamina, but it also develops one’s mental strength and capacity. For instance, the trekking in Padnunok, the members had to walk for about half an hour before reaching the forest, and that means, another half an hour walk after emerging from the forest, only this time, it added to their existing exhaustion from trekking in the forest.

[nur]

Oh ya, one more thing.. Could you please explain why it'd be better to use "example" rather than "epitome"? I wouldn't want to repeat the same mistake in the future.

[RonBee]

Not only does trekking build one’s physical stamina, but it also develops one’s mental strength and capacity.

Good!

For instance, the trekking in Padnunok, the members had to walk for about half an hour before reaching the forest, and that means, another half an hour walk after emerging from the forest, only this time, it added to their existing exhaustion from trekking in the forest.

Try:

For instance, on the trek to Padnunok (or the trek in Padnunok), the members had to walk for about half an hour before reaching the forest, and that meant half an hour walk after emerging from the forest, adding to their exhaustion from trekking in the forest.

Albeit this, they persevered and resolutely walked back to the starting point and refused to give up. This required not just muscles but mental strength as well. Another strenuous trekking was the one at Kampong Serdang with its legendary gigantic tree.

Try:

Nevertheless, they persevered and resolutely walked back to the starting point and refused to give up. That required not just muscle but mental strength as well. Another strenuous trek was the one at Kampong Serdang with its legendary gigantic tree.

~R

[nur]

Thanks RonBee!

Could you please explain why it would be better to use "example" rather than "epitome"? I'd like to have a better understanding of the usage of this word.

[RonBee]

An epitome is not just an example but a typical, highly representative example of something. If that is what you intend to say then go ahead and use it.

epitome
epitome definition - Dictionary - MSN Encarta
Definition of epitome - Merriam-Webster Online Dictionary
Cambridge Dictionaries Online - Cambridge University Press
Wordsmyth
epitome. The American Heritage® Dictionary of the English Language: Fourth Edition. 2000.
http://www.infoplease.com/dictionary/epitome
epitome - Definitions from Dictionary.com

~R

[nur]

I see.. Guess, that's what I intend to say. Ok, thanks again, RonBee.

[RonBee]

You're welcome, of course.

(To find what I found the way I found it go to OneLook Dictionary Search)

~R

[nur]

That's a really useful website. Thanks, RonBee!