preface

[kinglear]

Hi there,,

This a magazine preface..could you check it please..

Thanks a million

Preface
It gives us a great pleasure to release the first edition of Highlight. The magazine’s members have shown considerable cooperation as well as devotion.

Highlight was born at the initiative of xxx Secondary Boys School. The word “Highlights” indicates the specific aim that this magazine has been designed for. Simple and interesting articles have developed specific subjects regarding different fields.

On behave of the magazine’s members; I would like to express our thanks to the teachers and students who have partially contributed to the magazine.
We would also be pleased to receive any suggestion that could assist us with the second edition.

[Anglika]

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Originally Posted by kinglear

Hi there,,

This a magazine preface..could you check it please..

Thanks a million

Preface
It gives us a great pleasure to release the first edition of Highlight. The magazine’s members [magazines do not generally have "members". Do you mean "contributors"?] have shown considerable cooperation as well as devotion.

Highlight was born at the initiative of xxx Secondary Boys School. The word “Highlights” indicates the specific aim that this magazine has been designed for. Simple and interesting articles have developed specific subjects regarding different fields.

On behave [behalf] of the magazine’s members; I would like to express our thanks to the teachers and students who have partially contributed to the magazine.
We would also be pleased to receive any suggestion that could assist us with the second edition.

The structure is illogical.

para 1 - introduce the magazine, its origins and aims.
para 2 - Mention the range of topics to be covered.
para 3 - thank those contributing articles and providing support and assistance.

When quoting the name of the magazine, either make it Italics or put it into "quotes".