could you plz give me some tips on IELTS essay?

[Echo_Wen]

I am a senior school graduate...and i will take the test on Aug 16th....
my teacher said that the essay that i wrote today can get band 5.....
but ...i have to get band 6!!!!

could u plz give me some tips or ...sth like that.......

I feel so sad............
could any body give me a hand???

[RonBee]

If you post the essay here, I can tell you where you need to improve.

~R

[Echo_Wen]

thank u very much~
i'll post some essays here as soon as possible~