Sentences

[Fizzi]

Hi all,
Would somebody please help me with the sentences?
Regards,
Fizzi

1. I am delighted to hear that (organisation 1) and (organisation 2) are discussing on the issues related to advertisment and labelling.

2. I hope the discussion will provide better outcomes for both parties as enforcement of advertisements are challenging and complicated as we see with this advertisement.

3. The advertisement may violate sect 9 as the claim "the cheapest" is appeared in the advertisement and it also may not adhere to labelling guideline as the same claim is displayed in the label.

4. At the moment I am working with advertisements from the (country 1) and (country 2), truly, I always has disagreement with other researchers as advertisements and their regulation can be interpreted differently by different people. It depends on how the readers read them.

5. Just to let you know that I will be in (country 3) in Sept. If needed, please let me know if you wish me to do any presentation on consumer right or my research work in your department. I am happy to help.

6. Although the claim is printed on the box the product, the photo of the box and the claim does clearly appear on the advertisment and it can be read by readers and may mislead them.

7. I am assuming that Y is also prohibited by them.

[JLP]

Originally Posted by Fizzi

Hi all,
Would somebody please help me with the sentences?
Regards,
Fizzi

1. I am delighted to hear that (organisation 1) and (organisation 2) are discussing on the issues related to advertisment and labelling.

Maybe, "I am delighted to hear that X and Y are discussing their issues related to advertising and labeling."

2. I hope the discussion will provide better outcomes for both parties as enforcement of advertisements are challenging and complicated as we see with this advertisement.

"I hope this discussion will lead to better outcomes for both parties, since the enforcement of advertisements [could you explain what this phrase means?] is quite challenging. This is especially the case with the most recent advertisement [or "advertisement A."].

3. The advertisement may violate sect 9 as the claim "the cheapest" is appeared in the advertisement and it also may not adhere to labelling guideline as the same claim is displayed in the label.

"This advertisement may violate section 9, since the claim "the cheapest" appeared in it. In addition, it may not adhere to labeling guidelines either, since the same claim is displayed on the label."

4. At the moment I am working with advertisements from the (country 1) and (country 2), truly, I always has disagreement with other researchers as advertisements and their regulation can be interpreted differently by different people. It depends on how the readers read them.

"At the moment, I am working with advertisers [or marketing firms] from country 1 and country 2. I disagree with the other researchers, because advertisements and their regulation can be interpreted quite differently by different people. It all depends on the audience."

5. Just to let you know that I will be in (country 3) in Sept. If needed, please let me know if you wish me to do any presentation on consumer right or my research work in your department. I am happy to help.

"I plan on being in country 3 during September. Please let me know if you wish me to give any presentations on consumer rights or my research for your department. I will be happy to help."

6. Although the claim is printed on the box the product, the photo of the box and the claim does clearly appear on the advertisment and it can be read by readers and may mislead them.

"The claim is printed on the box, and the claim is clearly visible in photos of the boxed product. The claim can easily be read by our readers [is this a technical term?] and may mislead them." [I found this a bit confusing to read and hope I got it right; perhaps you could clarify?]

7. I am assuming that Y is also prohibited by them.

"I am assuming that they also prohibit Y."

I have put some suggestions after each sentence. There are some comments in brackets; a few suggest alternate wording that could be correctly used if you prefer it. The rest are simply my comments and requests for clarification.

[Fizzi]

Hi JLP,

Thanks for your comments. Here some clarification from me.

2..."since the enforcement of advertisements" : the monitoring of the compliance of advertisement with regulation.


6. How aobut this?: The photo of the box with the miselading claim does clearly appear on the advertisment and it can be read by consumers and may mislead them.

Regards,
Fizzi

[JLP]

Originally Posted by Fizzi

Hi JLP,

Thanks for your comments. Here some clarification from me.

2..."since the enforcement of advertisements" : the monitoring of the compliance of advertisement with regulation.

Oh, I see. Perhaps:

"I hope this discussion will lead to better outcomes for both parties, since ensuring that advertisements comply with the applicable regulations can be quite challenging. This is especially the case with the most recent advertisement [or "advertisement A."].

6. How about this?: The photo of the box with the misleading claim does clearly appear in the advertisement and it can be read by consumers and may mislead them.

This is a bit of a run-on. I might split it into two sentences as follows: "The photo of the box with the misleading claim does clearly appear in the advertisement. The claim can be easily read by consumers, and may mislead them.

Regards,
Fizzi

Hope this helps!

[Fizzi]

Thanks JLP!
Fizzi