short speech for TOEFL

[siruss]

Please check my speech for ibt TOEFL. Speaking time is 45 seconds.

Question>
Some people believe the advent of computers has made human lives better. Others say computers have a negative effect on society. Explain with which side you agree and why.

I think computers have a positive effect on human lives.
There is a wealth of information on the internet. It is open 24 hours a day to anyone who wants to increase their knowledge and receive news. Computers also make it easy and less expensive to communicate with people from all over the world. Through blogs and e-mail, we can communicate anytime we want to. Computers make the concept of global village tangible.

If the development of speech, grammar, or vocabualry is not good enough, please tell me. My speech score isn't very good. It's a little above the average. How can I make improvements? Are there any suggestions you can make? I'm open to any suggestions. Please, help me out.

[RonBee]

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I think computers have had a positive effect on human lives.
There is a wealth of information on the Internet. It is open 24 hours a day to anyone who wants to increase their knowledge and receive news. Computers also make it easy to communicate with people from all over the world. Through blogs and e-mail, we can communicate any time we want to. Computers make the concept of the global village tangible.

It is usually better not to use "less expensive" unless you are comparing something with something else.

~R

[siruss]

Suggested changes in red.


It is usually better not to use "less expensive" unless you are comparing something with something else.

~R

Thank you very much.