need help on interpretation of data..pls ^^

[nongporz]

Could anybody help me on this, please?
I need someone to correct and advise me on my writing~*

Now, I'm learing how to interpret the data from a diagram.
I have to use the information from the diagram..

Diagram 1 shows the trends in the improvement in the standard of living in Britain based on six categories. The bars compare the percentage of three years, 1969, 1979 and 1996, of people using each product.


and I choosed 2 categories of them which are...

1. refrigerators and fridge-freezers television:
1969 = 60%
1979 = 96%
1996 = 99%

2. television:
1969 = 91%
1979 = 96%
1996 = 99%

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and here's my writing>>


From Diagram 1 it can be seen that, in 1969, 60 percent of people in Britain owned refrigerators and fridge-freezers. Meanwhile, the largest number of households (91 percent) had access to televisions.

In 1979, the percentage of households with refrigerators and fridge-freezers increased significantly from 60 to 93 percent, whereas the number of people who owned televisions in Britain rose slightly to 96 percent compared with1969.

There was a small increase in both the percentage of households with refrigerators and fridge-freezers, and television from 1979 to 1996. As a result, almost all of households in Britain (99 percent) had refrigerators and fridge-freezers and television



help me please... thank you in andvance...

[Anglika]

From Diagram 1 it can be seen that, in 1969, 60 per cent of people in Britain owned refrigerators and fridge-freezers. Meanwhile, the largest number of households (91 per cent) had access to televisions. Since you are only comparing two sets of figures, "a larger percentage" would be better.

There was a small increase in both the percentage of households with refrigerators and fridge-freezers, and television, from 1979 to 1996. As a result, almost all of households in Britain (99 per cent) had refrigerators and fridge-freezers and television percentage result, by 1996 almost


Otherwise it looks fine.