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How I become a poetaster!
Hello to all.This is my third writing.Would you make some comments or corrections?Thank you very much. I talk in form of poetry when I was very little,perhaps since I could talk.I remember when I was a child,I had worn my aunt dress,I spun around myself,and I was talking in form poetry.My poems at that time didn't mean but they have good sound and melody. Until about eight mounth ago I take poem sometimes for myself,but never I had talk about them to nobody.I took my first meaning poem when I was twelwe,it's topic was the folux wagon car.I took it in the school way.About eight mounth ago just a week before Yalda night(Yalda is the longest night in the year,and is a special night in Iranian culture) my roommate recieved a SMS that congratulated Yalda.He told his SMS for our and I took a poem that time for responseing to that SMS.My roommates enjoyed my poem and told me my poem is good.Since that time I take poem sometimes in many topics.Although my poem usually is short but they are at the standard form.A friend offered me that I take poem for children to print in children book,perhaps a day I do so,but now I don't have time to do so.
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Space between sentences, please!


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Until about eight mounth ago I take poem sometimes for myself,but never I had talk about them to nobody.
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Until about eight months ago, I wrote poems for myself, but I never read any of them to anybody.
By talking in the form of poetry do you mean speaking in rhyme?

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Hi RonBee.Thanks for your attention.
Yes,but when I wrote the text I didn't know the word "rhyme".
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Now, post it again, but space after commas and periods (full stops).
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How I become a poetaster!
Hello to all.This is my third writing.Would you make some comments or corrections?
Thank you very much.
I talk in rhyme when I was very little,perhaps since I could talk.
I remember when I was a child,I had worn my aunt dress,I spun around myself,and I was talking in rhyme.
My poems at that time didn't mean,but they have good sound and melody.
Until about eight mounth ago I was rhymeing sometimes for myself,but never I had talk about them to nobody.I rhymed first meaning poem when I was twelwe,it's topic was the folux wagon car.I rhymed it in the school way.
About eight mounth ago just a week before Yalda night(Yalda is the longest night in the year,and is a special night in Iranian culture) my roommate recieved a SMS that congratulated Yalda.He told his SMS for our and I rhymed a poem at that time for responseing to that SMS.
My roommates enjoyed my poem and told me,my poem is good.Since that time I rhyme sometimes in many
topics.Although my poem usually is short,but they are at the standard form.A friend offered me that I rhyme for children to print in children book,perhaps a day I do so,but now I don't have time to do so.
Have good time and good bye.

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I am slightly worried by your use of the word "poetaster". Have you looked it up in a dictionary?
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Hi.
Yes that means not famous poet or little poet that have little experience.
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Hmm - my dictionary says: • noun a person who writes inferior poetry from M.Fr. poetastre (1554), from L. poeta (poet) + -aster, diminutive (pejorative) suffix

Seriously, I would avoid calling yourself this.
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In English,what you call a person who write non professional poet or a non professional football player or so.
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An amateur is someone who does something for pleasure rather than for pay.
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