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| In the transition from elementary to high school, everything changed dramatically. In grade eight, I felt like I was suddenly given an enormous amount of freedom. For instance, I can go home for lunch without having my parents sign a permission form. In addition to that, I do not have to ask for permission to go to the washroom or wander around the halls. In all my academic years, grade eight was the most successful year. I got on the honor roll, received many awards and certificates. . The best part was that, I didn’t have to work hard for my achievements. Indeed grade eight wasn’t really important; however I did gain confidence through my success. For instance, there was no homework that I felt I was unable to complete. Also, I was not shy to raise my hand to answer questions. The best thing I like about grade eight is being a popular student at school. All my teachers liked me a lot. I met many new friends and had many memorable moments together. For example, I remembered in November of 1996, my friends and I went to watch a movie; it was special because, it was my first time watching a movie without parents or adult supervision around. I felt like I have grown up. In conclusion, grade eight is the best school year. Those memories are still vivid in colors as I sit here writing my LPI essay. I hope in the future my children will feel the same way as I did (entering high school). |
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| What is an LPI essay? I haven't heard the term before. I'd change this: In grade eight, I felt like I was suddenly given an enormous amount of freedom I'd use 'as if' instead of 'like'. Also,I wonder whether saying you didn't have to study hard is that advisable. |
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it is used in most canadian universities and collges. I need a five, which is around 80% on the test (the whole exam does not count except the essay) to take first year english. i need english to graduate and go on to third year **also thank-you for you reply** :D |
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| thank-you again for your editing :D :D ronbee |
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| You're welcome. I hope I helped. :D |
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| I think the openning about your current UBC student status is nothing to do with your topic. it sounds like you are writing a resume. better to make some connection, contrast. in fact, you should have more freedom at UBC. instead, you may mention a miserable experience in elementary school, serving as a transition and contrast to your grade 8 happy life. |
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