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Currently, I am a student at University of British Columbia faculty of Arts. I am majoring in Asian Studies. Asian History is my favorite subject, I always approach it with confidence; because, I find it easy, traces back to my heritage and also it gives an understanding of today’s economy and people.

Unlike math, history courses does no require a student to practice and memorize a lot of formulas; however one must have a good memory to be successful. I do find it hard to memorize things; however I find it even more difficult to put formula in use or translate a question into a mathematical question. Unlike other science courses, history course only have one midterm, one final, one or two research papers: having students under less pressure. I have taken many Asian Studies courses and each course I Received a grade no less then a C+.

I am Chinese; learning about Asian history gives me an understanding about my heritage. In addition, it would eliminate barrier that exist between my parents and I. The students that are in my department will help promote multiculturalism in the future. Canada is a multicultural country taking a course such as Japanese, Indian or Chinese history gives me pride and confidence.

To understand the future one must first understand the past. When I was taking Japanese history courses, I learned how Japan economy became so powerful through the Tokugawa period. If in the future, I want to start my own business in Japan, the Japanese history courses would contribute a lot to my success. In short, history courses are not useless.

In conclusion, in my opinion, either it is American, European or Asian history; all history courses will contribute to one’s future success. I believe that all university must not lack history courses, because it is a subject that will give me (and most people) an understanding of their existence and heritage etc.
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it can be traced back to my heritage and also it gives an understanding of today’s economy and people.

history courses do not require

put formula into practice

history courses only have one midterm,

putting students under less pressure.

In addition, it will eliminate barriers that exist between my parents and me.

Canada is a multicultural country; taking

how the Japanese economy

Japanese history courses will contribute

whether it is American, European or Asian history

all universities must

(Plus- delete 'etc' as the last word)
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It's a bit repetitious. Work on that. Perhaps you can explain your opinion a little more rather than just repeating yourself. Also, rather than saying history is not useless it would be better to say it is useful (or valuable). That would make for a stronger, more positive statement.

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:D :D thank-you again for your reply and editing
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thank you for your reply ronbee
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You're quite welcome.

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