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[RonBee]

Originally Posted by Latoof

Latifa said that she felt very comfortable in his classes and that he was a very kind to all of them. She felt him a father figure according to her situation as an orphan.

Perhaps:

• Latifa said that she felt very comfortable in his classes and that he was a very kind to all of them. She regarded him as a father figure because she was an orphan.

Originally Posted by Latoof

She said to her friend “I lost my father once and I don’t want to live this horrible experience again”

What horrible experience was she talking about? (What punctuation does that sentence need?)

:)

[RonBee]

Originally Posted by Latoof

Latifa said that she felt very comfortable in his classes and that he was a very kind to all of them. She felt him a father figure according to her situation as an orphan.

Perhaps:

• Latifa said that she felt very comfortable in his classes and that he was a very kind to all of them. She regarded him as a father figure because she was an orphan.

Originally Posted by Latoof

She said to her friend “I lost my father once and I don’t want to live this horrible experience again”

What horrible experience was she talking about? (What punctuation does that sentence need?)

:)

[RonBee]

Originally Posted by Latoof

Ms. Mouza took Latifa between her arms and cried painfully.

Perhaps:

• Ms Mouza held Latifa in her arms and cried painfully.

:)

[RonBee]

Originally Posted by Latoof

Ms. Mouza took Latifa between her arms and cried painfully.

Perhaps:

• Ms Mouza held Latifa in her arms and cried painfully.

:)

[RonBee]

Originally Posted by Latoof

Mr. Ron felt that there was something unusual with Latifa.

Say "about" instead of "with" there.

Originally Posted by Latoof

She kept sending him e-mail in the father’s day, telling him that he was a father figure and these sorts of things.

• She kept sending him emails on Father's Day, telling him that he was a father figure and those sorts of things.

That couldn't have been very often, since Father's Day only comes once a year. Or does Father's Day mean something else in Arab countries?

Originally Posted by Latoof

Mr. Ron understood that the lack of a father in Latifa’s life was what made her to feel so close to him.

That's good. :)

Originally Posted by Latoof

He thought about making her to understand that he got a wife and his wife had daughters of an ex-marriage and that he had his own family.

Try:

• He thought about trying to make her understand that he had a wife and stepdaughters--that he had his own family to worry about.

Originally Posted by Latoof

He tried to make her to understand that she was his student, and nothing more.

That is good, but you don't need the comma there.

Originally Posted by Latoof

Although it was too difficult for him to ignore her he was sure that it would be the best for both of them.

• Although it was difficult for him to ignore her, he was sure that it would be the best thing for both of them.

Originally Posted by Latoof

She has sent him an email and waited for a reply, but she did not receive any. She sent him another e-mail asking him to reply. She wrote literally:
“Why don’t you answer my e-mails?

Replace "has" (in the first sentence) with "had".

Originally Posted by Latoof

Please don’t be angry with me, I won’t help see you angry.

Perhaps:

• Please don't be angry with me. I don't want you to be angry.

Originally Posted by Latoof

Listen, I rather to day than to live alone once again, your daughter”

I am not sure what you are trying to say there. Please rewrite that.

Originally Posted by Latoof

Mr. Ron recognized that Latifa was broken entirely because of her father’s death. He knew that she needed a counselor to talk with. He sent to his friend James who was a therapist for help.

• Mr. Ron recognized that Latifa was broken up because of her father's death. He knew that she needed a counselor to talk with. He wrote to his friend James (who was a therapist) for help.

:)

[RonBee]

Originally Posted by Latoof

Mr. Ron felt that there was something unusual with Latifa.

Say "about" instead of "with" there.

Originally Posted by Latoof

She kept sending him e-mail in the father’s day, telling him that he was a father figure and these sorts of things.

• She kept sending him emails on Father's Day, telling him that he was a father figure and those sorts of things.

That couldn't have been very often, since Father's Day only comes once a year. Or does Father's Day mean something else in Arab countries?

Originally Posted by Latoof

Mr. Ron understood that the lack of a father in Latifa’s life was what made her to feel so close to him.

That's good. :)

Originally Posted by Latoof

He thought about making her to understand that he got a wife and his wife had daughters of an ex-marriage and that he had his own family.

Try:

• He thought about trying to make her understand that he had a wife and stepdaughters--that he had his own family to worry about.

Originally Posted by Latoof

He tried to make her to understand that she was his student, and nothing more.

That is good, but you don't need the comma there.

Originally Posted by Latoof

Although it was too difficult for him to ignore her he was sure that it would be the best for both of them.

• Although it was difficult for him to ignore her, he was sure that it would be the best thing for both of them.

Originally Posted by Latoof

She has sent him an email and waited for a reply, but she did not receive any. She sent him another e-mail asking him to reply. She wrote literally:
“Why don’t you answer my e-mails?

Replace "has" (in the first sentence) with "had".

Originally Posted by Latoof

Please don’t be angry with me, I won’t help see you angry.

Perhaps:

• Please don't be angry with me. I don't want you to be angry.

Originally Posted by Latoof

Listen, I rather to day than to live alone once again, your daughter”

I am not sure what you are trying to say there. Please rewrite that.

Originally Posted by Latoof

Mr. Ron recognized that Latifa was broken entirely because of her father’s death. He knew that she needed a counselor to talk with. He sent to his friend James who was a therapist for help.

• Mr. Ron recognized that Latifa was broken up because of her father's death. He knew that she needed a counselor to talk with. He wrote to his friend James (who was a therapist) for help.

:)

[RonBee]

Originally Posted by Latoof

James wrote back in a reply to Ron’s letter:
“What I can see is that Latifa is in need to a man who can play the role of a father in her life.

• James wrote back in reply to Ron’s letter:
  “What I can see is that Latifa is in need of man who can play the role of a father in her life.

Originally Posted by Latoof

But I am so afraid of her use to the idea of death.

Perhaps:

• But I am afraid she is obsessed with the idea of death.

Originally Posted by Latoof

I know that these people think that they are in a challenge with the death.

A battle with death? A fight with death? A struggle with death?

Originally Posted by Latoof

They say if the death will take our beloved and prevents us of being with them, so we can proceed him and stop the lovely moments we live by dying.

Perhaps:
They

• say that if death will take our beloved and prevent us from being with them....

Originally Posted by Latoof

I think there was not anyone to talk to her after her father death to make her to understand the death as her father died while she was too young.

Perhaps:

• I don't think there was anyone to talk to her after her father died to help her understand, as she was too young for that.

Originally Posted by Latoof

She was needed to talk out all the fear and the sadness in side her.

• She needs to talk out all the fear and sadness inside her.

Originally Posted by Latoof

What can say to you is not to ignore her for a very long time. You can answer one of her messages, to make her to feel that you are supporting her. But never get so close. Yours James.”

Perhaps:

• What I can say to you is not to ignore her for a very long time. You can answer one of her messages, to make her to feel that you are supporting her. But never get so close. Yours, James.

What do you think?

:)

[RonBee]

Originally Posted by Latoof

James wrote back in a reply to Ron’s letter:
“What I can see is that Latifa is in need to a man who can play the role of a father in her life.

• James wrote back in reply to Ron’s letter:
  “What I can see is that Latifa is in need of man who can play the role of a father in her life.

Originally Posted by Latoof

But I am so afraid of her use to the idea of death.

Perhaps:

• But I am afraid she is obsessed with the idea of death.

Originally Posted by Latoof

I know that these people think that they are in a challenge with the death.

A battle with death? A fight with death? A struggle with death?

Originally Posted by Latoof

They say if the death will take our beloved and prevents us of being with them, so we can proceed him and stop the lovely moments we live by dying.

Perhaps:
They

• say that if death will take our beloved and prevent us from being with them....

Originally Posted by Latoof

I think there was not anyone to talk to her after her father death to make her to understand the death as her father died while she was too young.

Perhaps:

• I don't think there was anyone to talk to her after her father died to help her understand, as she was too young for that.

Originally Posted by Latoof

She was needed to talk out all the fear and the sadness in side her.

• She needs to talk out all the fear and sadness inside her.

Originally Posted by Latoof

What can say to you is not to ignore her for a very long time. You can answer one of her messages, to make her to feel that you are supporting her. But never get so close. Yours James.”

Perhaps:

• What I can say to you is not to ignore her for a very long time. You can answer one of her messages, to make her to feel that you are supporting her. But never get so close. Yours, James.

What do you think?

:)

[RonBee]

Originally Posted by Latoof

Two weeks later, Latifa stopped sending messages to her teacher and she remained quieter.

I am not really sure what the "remained quieter" part means. You might want to rewrite that.

Originally Posted by Latoof

Once, it was Mr. Ron’s writing class, but it was not Latifa’s section.

Perhaps:

• One time Mr. Ron was teaching his writing class. It was not one Latifa was supposed to be in.

Originally Posted by Latoof

After ten minutes of the class beginning, Latifa entered the class. She looked at her teacher and went to set at the end of the room. Mr. Ron carried on in teaching.

Perhaps:

• Ten minutes after the class started, Latifa entered the class. She looked at her teacher and went to sit at the end of the room. Mr. Ron carried on with his teaching.

Originally Posted by Latoof

The lecture last an hour and twenty minutes. When all the students left the lass Mr. Ron looked at Latifa to asked her to talk. But Latifa was gazing at her teacher silently. Her eyes were frozen and her lips were blue.

• The lecture lasted an hour and twenty minutes. After all the students had left the class, Mr. Ron looked at Latifa and asked her to talk. But Latifa was gazing at her teacher silently. Her eyes were frozen and her lips were blue.

Originally Posted by Latoof

He asked her again, and sat on the floor next to her. Mr. Ron took her hand and he discovered a very horrible thing she did to herself. Latifa was bleeding all the time as she has cut her arteries. She left on her disk a paper and wrote by her blood “Sorry, but I was not able to see you disappearing from my life”
Latifa died at that time, and her teacher screams for help were not useful.

• He asked her again, and sat on the floor next to her. Mr. Ron took her hand and he discovered a very horrible thing she had done to herself. Latifa was bleeding at the time, as she had cut her arteries. She had left on her desk a piece of paper, and on it was a message written in her blood: " Sorry, but I was not able to see you disappearing from my life” Latifa died, and her teacher's screams for help were of no avail.
  

[RonBee]

Originally Posted by Latoof

Two weeks later, Latifa stopped sending messages to her teacher and she remained quieter.

I am not really sure what the "remained quieter" part means. You might want to rewrite that.

Originally Posted by Latoof

Once, it was Mr. Ron’s writing class, but it was not Latifa’s section.

Perhaps:

• One time Mr. Ron was teaching his writing class. It was not one Latifa was supposed to be in.

Originally Posted by Latoof

After ten minutes of the class beginning, Latifa entered the class. She looked at her teacher and went to set at the end of the room. Mr. Ron carried on in teaching.

Perhaps:

• Ten minutes after the class started, Latifa entered the class. She looked at her teacher and went to sit at the end of the room. Mr. Ron carried on with his teaching.

Originally Posted by Latoof

The lecture last an hour and twenty minutes. When all the students left the lass Mr. Ron looked at Latifa to asked her to talk. But Latifa was gazing at her teacher silently. Her eyes were frozen and her lips were blue.

• The lecture lasted an hour and twenty minutes. After all the students had left the class, Mr. Ron looked at Latifa and asked her to talk. But Latifa was gazing at her teacher silently. Her eyes were frozen and her lips were blue.

Originally Posted by Latoof

He asked her again, and sat on the floor next to her. Mr. Ron took her hand and he discovered a very horrible thing she did to herself. Latifa was bleeding all the time as she has cut her arteries. She left on her disk a paper and wrote by her blood “Sorry, but I was not able to see you disappearing from my life”
Latifa died at that time, and her teacher screams for help were not useful.

• He asked her again, and sat on the floor next to her. Mr. Ron took her hand and he discovered a very horrible thing she had done to herself. Latifa was bleeding at the time, as she had cut her arteries. She had left on her desk a piece of paper, and on it was a message written in her blood: " Sorry, but I was not able to see you disappearing from my life” Latifa died, and her teacher's screams for help were of no avail.