Please Someone Give A Look To My Conclusion Please ! Por Favor!

[majeb]

Originally Posted by RonBee

Your advice is good, but I would simplify things even further.

Although most of the Peruvian families will continue living in Japan, several of them are considering returning to Peru.

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There are many things that affect that decision. Among them are job opportunities and family ties.

Indeed!

I just assumed the text was part of an Academic Paper in which causes should be included in order to explain the Author's conclussions. Therefore, a few more details were required.

On the other hand, I inferred from yrmacita's text, that some Peruvian families have already returned to Peru, some are now returning, and the ones that remain in Japan are considering those repatriates' experiences (since some were born Peruvians but some had Japanese offsprings that are now living in a whole new culture) to decide what to do.

[yrmacita]

Thank you very much for all your corrections and suggestions!!

Muchas Gracias

[RonBee]

Originally Posted by majeb

Indeed!

I just assumed the text was part of an Academic Paper in which causes should be included in order to explain the Author's conclussions. Therefore, a few more details were required.

There is nothing wrong with including details (explanations), but most of it is hard for me to understand.

Originally Posted by majeb

On the other hand, I inferred from yrmacita's text, that some Peruvian families have already returned to Peru, some are now returning, and the ones that remain in Japan are considering those repatriates' experiences (since some were born Peruvians but some had Japanese offsprings that are now living in a whole new culture) to decide what to do.

You explained things quite well. (You also read more of it than I did.) It is interesting that you say that some of the Peruvian immigrants have children who are Japanese (born in Japan). That complicates things. If those children were to move to Peru they would not be returning home; they would be leaving home.


Your explanation is, I think, quite good, and it is the way the original should be written.

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[yrmacita]

Dear RonBee: Thank you very much for your accurate observation, I tried to say that parents would lead to the enforced decision(stay in Japan)...sorry about my bad writing style!

Dear Majeb: You are so right about my long sentences in English. I will try my best to think more in English and forget Spanish, but still a lot of to learn at the time of writing in English.

Thank you both of you, I really appreciate your corrections and advises.
I would like to ask you something very important to me, now, I am writing my report and I need dome proofreading, would you give me some help with this when I finish it? Hope you can help me.

Sincerely yours,
Irma