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Old 04-Feb-2008, 06:41
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I'm doing a journal exchange with a 3rd-grader as a part of my Second Language Teaching course. I'm quite embarrassed that I'm struggling with the basic grammar and I do not wish to make any grammatical errors as this will be read before the kid's class.

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I don’t have a Nintendo DS either, but I played Trauma Center on my friend’s DS once and I got hooked. I’ve played Donkey Kong before, not on a Game Boy, but on a Super Nintendo. Super Nintendo is like Playstation or Xbox in the 90s, and I used to play games after games with it when I was your age. Good old times. Now I’m too busy keeping up with university and I can’t do that anymore.
My favourite cartoon, eh? I have to say Vision of Escaflowne. It’s difficult to say in one sentence what it is about, but Escaflowne is a large sword-wielding robot that can transform into a dragon-like form when it needs to fly. It was on YTV a few years ago.
Yes, I do skate, but only occasionally. Do you skate well? I can barely balance myself. Soccer is the only sport I can say I’m good at. How about you? Are you good at any other sports?
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All looks good except use "game after game" (single games). You should not worry too much about mistakes. The class will have a good laugh and you won't know!
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