Letter_application_2

[Fizzi]

Can somebody please help me with sentences?
Regards,
Fizzi
1-An extension of the scholarship will not only enable me to complete my master thesis, but also, to produce a high quality master work.
2- In addition, it will provide me with the opportunity to attend and present my research work in international conferences.
3. Similar application by another master candidate, (name of a candidate) from the University of S has been approved by the department of Y.

[Shakespeare's brother]

1-An extension of the scholarship will enable me to complete my master thesis and produce high quality work.

2- In addition, it will provide me with the opportunity to attend international conferences at which I can present my research work.

3. The department of Y has approved a similar application from (name of a candidate), another master candidate from the University of S.

Any good?

[Fizzi]

Dear Shakespeare's brother,
Thanks for all your help.
Regards,
Fizzi