Check my letter writing please.

[jomo27]

My teacher told us to make a letter writing.
So can you guys please check the mistakes.

Thanks.



Dear Tam,

In just 1 week, my school starts holiday and I'll be going with you. I'm looking forward to see your family and you, and stay with them. This is my first time staying with friend who lives outside my country, Singapore. And I'm very excited.

My home, Fujian, is not the biggest city but the most known city. It has a lot of villages and small towns, and some cities, but the whole city is not common for tourists. But there are still some places to visit such as temples, mountains, and so on. Moreover, the air is really fresh and cool. In addition, you can find many old chinese restaurants and shops here.
I'm sure your country has a lot of attractive places too. And I'm no longer able to wait to see that.

My mom is calling me, so I can't write any more to you. So please reply my letter. See you soon!

I look forward to you response.

Regards,
Tom

[Horsa]

Dear Tam,

In just a week, my school starts its holiday, and I'll be coming to stay with you. I'm really looking forward to seeing/meeting you and your family. This will be the first time I will have been outside Singapore and I'm very excited about it.

My home, Fujian, is not the biggest but it is the most famous city. It is surrounded by (???) a lot of villages and small towns. Fulian is not a usual destination for tourists, but there are still some places to visit such as temples, mountains, and so on. Moreover, the air is really fresh and cool. In addition, you can find many good Chinese restaurants and shops here.

I'm sure your country has a lot of attractive places too, and I can't wait to see it.

My mom is calling me, so I can't write any more to you. Please reply to my letter soon.

See you soon!

Regards,
Tom


('I look forward to you response.' is too formal for this letter)

[jomo27]

Thanks for correcting my letter writing.

I wanna put a sentence behind tbe "Fujian is not a usual..."

- People here usually speak Hokkian rather than Mandarin.


Help me again! Thanks!

[Horsa]

Your sentence is good but I think I would put it after '... famous city'

[jomo27]

Sure. Nice suggestion.

Anyway, are all the grammar correct?

[Anglika]

Originally Posted by jomo27

Sure. Nice suggestion.

Anyway, is all the grammar correct?

If you repost your revised letter, we can tell you if it is ok or not

[jomo27]

Sure!

[jomo27]

Dear Tam,

In just a week, my school starts its holiday, and I'll be coming to stay with you. I'm really looking forward to seeing/meeting you and your family. This will be the first time I will have been outside Singapore and I'm very excited about it.

My home, Fujian, is not the biggest but it is the most famous city. People here usually speak Hokkian rather than Mandarin. It is surrounded by (???) a lot of villages and small towns. Fulian is not a usual destination for tourists, but there are still some places to visit such as temples, mountains, and so on. Moreover, the air is really fresh and cool. In addition, you can find many good Chinese restaurants and shops here.

I'm sure your country has a lot of attractive places too, and I can't wait to see it.

My mom is calling me, so I can't write any more to you. Please reply to my letter soon.

See you soon!

Regards,
Tom

[Anglika]

Originally Posted by jomo27

Dear Tam,

In just a week, my school starts its holiday, and I'll be coming to stay with you. I'm really looking forward to seeing/meeting you and your family. This will be the first time I will have been outside Singapore and I'm very excited about it.

My home, Fujian, is not the biggest but it is the most famous city. People here usually speak Hokkian rather than Mandarin. It is surrounded by (???) a lot of villages and small towns. Fulian is not a usual destination for tourists, but there are still some places to visit such as temples, mountains, and so on. Moreover, the air is really fresh and cool. In addition, you can find many good Chinese restaurants and shops here.

I'm sure your country has a lot of attractive places too, and I can't wait to see it.

My mom is calling me, so I can't write any more to you. Please reply to my letter soon.

See you soon!

Regards,
Tom

Otherwise looks fine to me.

[jomo27]

Allright.