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Old 19-Aug-2004, 18:32
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Two years ago, I told her to take care of my dog for three days. On the second day, my dog ran away, and I was very upset. I did not blame her because it was my fault to let my dog stay with her. My friend felt miserable, and she tried her best to cheer me up by giving me a puppy.
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In line two, I'd say 'before taking any action'

Para 2 line 4- my fault for leaving my dog with her

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In line two, I'd say 'before taking any action'

Para 2 line 4- my fault for leaving my dog with her

thanks tdol
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