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Old 25-Aug-2004, 06:33
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his style is unique, and his art pieces are natural, rich in charm, with disturbance in peace, splendour in leisure.
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with disturbance in peace,

This phrase doesn't work for me. If the pieces are not relaxing to the eye, you could say they are 'provocative'. Who is the artist?
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Hehe, drop it then.

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