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There are many ways of getting to know a country and its culture.

There are people that love sunbathing and relaxing on the hot sand in the beach, others that prefer spending their time visiting museum and famous sights, others, finally, that enjoy learning the language that is spoken in that particular country and so on.

Personally,when I travel I prefer relaxing and spending time in the most important cities of the country but above all learning the attitude and uses of the local people.

I love travelling, not only because you can fell free from the daily routine, but also for the important experience that you can remember in the years.
At times when you travel you have the impression that you're dreaming, because there are a lot of breathtaking places all over the world, and when you release that what you're seeing is the real world you coudn't say anything instead of love it!
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There are many ways of getting to know a country and its culture.

There are people that love sunbathing and relaxing on the hot sand in the beach, others that prefer spending their time visiting museum and famous sights, others, finally, that enjoy learning the language that is spoken in that particular country and so on.

Personally,when I travel I prefer relaxing and spending time in the most important cities of the country but above all learning the attitude and uses of the local people.

I love travelling, not only because you can fell free from the daily routine, but also for the important experience that you can remember in the years.
At times when you travel you have the impression that you're dreaming, because there are a lot of breathtaking places all over the world, and when you release that what you're seeing is the real world you coudn't say anything instead of love it!
Hi,
i would say it is better if you wrote:There are people who love..
then: relaxing on the sand at the beach, others prefer spending their time visiting museums and famous sights and others enjoy learning the language, which is spoken..

The second paragraph sounds a bit strange to me. First of all, don't put when I travel that makes it so unteresting to read.. then in my opinion after the local people. there should come sth. the sentence doesn't sound to be finished does it?

Finally, in the third paragraph:..you can feel free..also for the important experience that you will never forget or you will (always) remember in the following years...When you are going to travel around you have the impressions.. and when you release (did you want to say release or realise???) (that,) what you have seen in the real world, you won't be able to say anything else than I love it!

well, i hope i could help you i'm not a native speaker but iam going to an english school so.. if you have any other questions just ask!

with best wishes miss solero exotic
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You have right!

The second paragraph isn't really comprehensible!But in the reality I don't know what I can write better.Would you like to give me some suggestions about it?

I really thank you for your correction!
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Personally, when I travel, I like relaxing and spending time in the most important cities of the country, but above all I like learning the ways of the local people.
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I'm really very thankful with you!=)=)

Your piece of advice is really very useful for me!

LOve,gx90t!!
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