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Old 30-Aug-2004, 04:59
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Merits and defects of Plasma, LCD, DLP TV sets



Digital Light Processor television has a big screen, and looks upscale and grand. The size of a DLP television can easily reach 38 inches which is beyond the grasp of a traditional cathode-ray tube. But DLP has its fatal defects -- both its brightness and definition cannot be enough high; its jumbo size occupies too many room; and over time, its quality attenuates rapidly.

LCD television is wafer-thin and very light, radiation-free and has high definition. It occupies little room -- you can put it on your TV set, hang it on wall even ceiling; and you can watch it when laying on bed. LCD looks cute and comfortable. But its size is so limited that engineers cannot make it as big as DLP or Plasma TV set according to the technological level nowadays.

Plasma television possesses both the merits of DLP and LCD, while avoided both the defects of them -- the size of a Plasma television can reach the size of a DLP, and its brightness and definition are far better than a DLP television set; and at the same time, the Plasma is as wafer-thin and very light as a LCD.
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l1- I'm not too sure about 'upscale' in BE, we'd probably say upmarket
l2- comma after 'inches'
l3- 'fatal defects'- how about serious flaws?
l4 brightness and definition are not high enough
l6 its size takes up too much space

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l2 on a wall or even a ceiling (you could use 'the')
l3 lying
l5 cannot make it as big.... due to technical limitations

Para 3
l1 avoiding the defects of both-
l4 take out 'very'

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Thank you Tdol
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