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Old 14-Apr-2008, 16:47
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Smile Plucking the calla

At today`s noon, my friends and I met at tha Taipei station and prepared to go to Yangminshan National Park.

Yet, I felt a llittle bit sloppy because I slept nearly 6 hours so as to play online game.= =

To the end, we still went to Yangminshan National Park because we promised this trip together.

Wow, a lot of cars. We spent a large amount of time arriving at the destination.

My bottom was numbed by the long distance.

It was huge crowds of people. Everyone aims at one purpose, that is , to pluck the calla.

When we finished plucking the calla, we decided to go to the school.

Because I originally felt a little bit drowsy, during going down the mountain, I was getting to fall asleep.

It`s a nice trip.
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Today at noon, my friends and I met at tha Taipei station and prepared to go to Yangminshan National Park. I felt a little bit sloppy because I only slept y 6 hours because I played online games. We still went to Yangminshan National Park because we promised to do this trip together.

Wow, there were a lot of cars. It took a long time to arrive at the destination. My bottom was numbed from sitting all that distance.

There were huge crowds of people. Everyone aim was for one purpose, that is, to pluck the calla lillies. When we finished plucking the callas, we decided to go to the school.

Because I felt a little bit drowsy, going down the mountain I fell asleep. It was a nice trip.

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You could write more. WHY does everyone want to pluck the calla lily? Describe the flower. What did you do with them?
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Default Re: Plucking the calla

Sorry bid213 what does "calla" mean?...i can't find that word in the dictionary

( my writing skill is not good,i'm newbie)
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Calla is a planet name. I used the Yahoo dictionary to find this word.
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thank you much!
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Google calla lily
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