"Economics in Bahrain and Japan" [contrast and comparison]

[amona86]

this is my new eassy ,,

I change almost the whole topics according to my professor

and I need new correction for it grammer , syntax ,, etc

Economics in Bahrain and Japan

Are we going to have a balanced scale when we put Bahrain and Japan on it!? Can Japan and Bahrain be successfully economically collaborated to each other?!! Once we hear Japan, our mind will directly recognize that Japan is one of the largest economies in the world and is the leader in the technology and machinery area. "Japan is the world's second-largest economy" by real GDP, nominal GDP and by market exchange rates. Bahrain is a small kingdom not well known by other nations. In fact, there are two differences and two similarities between Bahrain and Japan.

When we come to considering differences, what is the most notable is the resource of their economy. Even though Japan is powerful in industry, it imports the resources from other countries, while on the other side Bahrain exports its resources to the outside. For example: its oil which is the most valuable resource and the power of its economy. Moreover, the workforce of Japan in their economy are almost locals , because the local has the priority in their economy, however, the workforce in Bahrain are other nationalities come from the poor countries such as India , who are accept lower wage than local workforce.

Bahrain and Japan share two main similarities despite the differences. First of all, both Bahrain and Japan in the past went through crises that played a role in their economy, while as Japan entered in the 2nd world war and ended with huge damage, Bahrain faced an oil crises in the gulf war. But both Bahrain and Japan stood up and continued to develop their economy in a better way than before. Free trade agreement (FTA) was adapted by Japan for strengthening the weak sector in their economy. also, Bahrain followed this policy in an agreement with the USA.

When we compare the economy in both Bahrain and Japan we find that they differ in their import and export and also in their workforce. As well, Bahrain and Japan are has same economic policy (FTA), also both went through hard crises in their economy. These similarities and differences play a major role in defining the relationship between these countries. The economics of Japan and the economics of Bahrain have many differences, but they also have much in common, and I believe that Bahrain and Japan are able to collaborate successfully in many economic areas.

[amona86]

please, i have only 2 days

[RonBee]

"Can Japan and Bahrain be successfully economically collaborated to each other?" means what? Can there be trade between Japan and Bahrain? (Of course.)

[RonBee]

Unfortunately, this one is likely to have most readers scratching their heads thinking, "What is this person trying to say?"

If this is about whether there can be trade between Bahrain and Japan then the obvious answer is of course there can. (Japan imports all its oil, so obviously there is a market for oil there. In Bahrain there is a market for electronics made in Japan.)

Many people in Bahrain have come there to find work. Many people go to Japan, but they usually go there as tourists or on business--not to find work in a Japanese industry.

One could say that the best thing to happen to Japan was to lose a war to the United States. Bahrain hasn't been that lucky.


Well, it's past my bedtime.

[amona86]

Ronbee, thank you

I have no problem with my introduction, because my professor saw it , she confused about a sentence and I remove it .

the second paragraph is about the differences , as we can see Japan workforce if you note they are almost locals , they can work at any job even in low job ,, but Bahrain people don't want to work in low job and with low wage ,, that's why Bahrain have a lot of foreigners.. in high field and low field..

about the export and import we can find something seems like joke , that Japan here imports their materials from outside to produce goods , while Bahrain exports the material to other country to buy goods..

the similarities , if you Look more deeper and get what I want to see ( maybe it wasn't clear ) I want to say that both stood up and continue the development after crises aren't like other countries which the war destroyed them completely !! Can you get what I try to say!!

Then they both have similar policy in their economics to increase the chances to adapt with the pace of world economics!!

What can I say to make all these clear!!

Tomorrow I have to submit it and she told us she want our essay clear with no grammar mistakes!!
I have no one to correct my grammar, so I'm waiting

[RonBee]

There's really not enough time.

Originally Posted by amona86

I have no problem with my introduction, because my professor saw it , she confused about a sentence and I remove it .

That should really be two sentences. Perhaps:

I have no problem with my introduction, because my professor saw it. She was confused about a sentence, and I removed it.

The first sentence, while perfectly grammatical, doesn't really make sense. It seems to be saying that your introduction is a good one because your professor saw it.

I really have no more time right now. I've got to go.

[amona86]

RonBee, Thank you a lot

you did your best last time

i hope someone have time could help me

[Anglika]

Originally Posted by amona86

Economics in Bahrain and Japan

Are we going to have a balanced scale when we put Bahrain and Japan on it!? Can Japan and Bahrain successfully economically collaborated to collaborate with each other?!![Do not use multiple punctuation in this way. Use a single mark - in these cases, a question mark] Once we hear [How can you "hear" Japan?] Japan, our mind will directly recognize that Japan is one of the largest economies in the world and is the leader in the technology and machinery area. "Japan is the world's second-largest economy" by real GDP, nominal GDP and by market exchange rates. Bahrain is a small kingdom not well known to other nations. In fact, there are two differences and two similarities between Bahrain and Japan. When we come to considering differences, what is the most notable is the resource of their economy. Even though Japan is powerful in industry, it imports the resources [raw materials] from other countries, while on the other side Bahrain exports its resources to the outside[tautologous - you do not need to say export to the outside, since export means that]. For example, its oil, which is the most valuable resource and the power of its economy. Moreover, the workforce of Japan in their economy are almost locals [is largely native/is largely drawn from the local communities], because the local has the priority in their economy, however, [whereas] the workforce in Bahrain are other nationalities[is chiefly/largely people who] come from the poor countries such as India, whowill accept lower wages than the local workers.

Bahrain and Japan share two main similarities despite the differences[omit]. First of all, both Bahrain and Japan in the past went through crises that played a role in their economy. , while as [omit] Japan entered the 2nd World War and ended with huge damage, Bahrain faced an oil crisis in the Gulf War. But both Bahrain and Japan stood up [recovered] and continued to develop their economy in a better way than before. A Free Trade Agreement (FTA) was adopted by Japan for strengthening the weak sector in their economy. also, [omit] Bahrain followed this policy in an agreement with the USA.

When we compare the economy in both Bahrain and Japan we find that they differ in their imports and exports and also in their workforce. At the same time, Bahrain and Japan are has [have/follow/apply] a similar economic policy (FTA), and both went through hard crises in their economy. These similarities and differences play a major role in defining the relationship between these countries. The economics of Japan and the economics of Bahrain have many differences, but they also have much in common, and I believe that Bahrain and Japan are able to collaborate successfully in many economic areas.

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[amona86]

i'm over the moon as they say,

finally i have done with this essay

thank you a lot Anglika , you help me and finally i can relieve.

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?!![Do not use multiple punctuation in this way. Use a single mark - in these cases, a question mark] Once we hear [How can you "hear" Japan?] Japan, our mind will directly recognize

i change it into


Once we hear the word "Japan", our mind will directly recognize that Japan is one of the largest economies in the world and is the leader in the technology and machinery area.


is that fine?

[Anglika]

That's much better.