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it have to be 1oo or more words but this is all i got.....help and please proofread


Everyone has his own definition of what defines a family. Despite whatever happens in life, a family will always be there for you. No matter what happens, you cannot force them out of your life. My family consists of four members, my dad, my mom, my two year old sister, and me. My dad and mom show a bit of graying hair as they are touching upon forty years old this year. Since I am the oldest sibling, my family depends on me to uphold many responsibilities. Among all my family members I'm closest to my mom.
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it have to be 1oo or more words but this is all i got.....help and please proofread


Everyone has his own definition of what defines a family. Despite whatever happens in life, a family will always be there for you. No matter what happens, you cannot force them out of your life. My family consists of four members, my dad, my mom, my two year old sister, and me. My dad and mom show a bit of graying hair as they are touching upon forty years old this year. Since I am the oldest sibling, my family depends on me to uphold many responsibilities. Among all my family members I'm closest to my mom.
Perhaps you could expand [write more] on the meaning of "family" at the beginning.
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Old 07-Jun-2008, 23:56
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Everyone has his own definition of what defines a family.
How can everybody have his own definition of what constitutes a family? (If that were true the word would be meaningless.)

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