[Essay] advantages & disadvantages of internet for kids

[jomo27]

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Q. Advantages & Disadvantages of Internet for Kids.


A.

As we know, a long time ago it was really hard to communicate with each other or even people from outsiders. With the development of technology, at last telephone was made and it is used till now. Those genius people made many useful stuff such as telephone, mobile-phone, airplane, computer and so on. However, those kind of items were really rare in the past, but now it is really common to everyone and almost everyone has it. Presently, there is one useful thing that is used by everyone to communicate with each other quickly and simplely, which is Internet. Internet is a browsing system that is use by using a computer or mobile-phons. In fact, by using internet, people can communicate with others even with a long distance. Moreover, it may also be used for gaming, web-browsing, chatting, downloading, sharing files, etc.

However, there are many advantages and disadvantages of internet for kids. Firstly, it's good for kids to know how to use a computer and internet. They can use it for searching good articles and syllabus for their schools. Furthermore, they can learn new things from the internet. Also they can do their homeworks on computer instead of wasting time writing down. However, there are also negative useness. They may open some bad sites like porn, xxx, or even worse. They may be addicted to games on the computer or even online-games. Those cases may bring bad effects to kids. Because they learn what they see and do.

In brief, I think Internet is a good way to learn new things. But we must monitor them and telling them the good things.


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[RonBee]

Originally Posted by jomo27

As we know, a long time ago it was really hard to communicate with each other or even people from outsiders.

The invention of the telephone changed everything.

Originally Posted by jomo27

With the development of technology, at last telephone was made and it is used till now.

Maybe not. (I wouldn't say at last the telephone was invented, nor would I say it was used until now.)

You need to work on making that more coherent (easier to understand).