My Baby Sister

[RonBee]

On Sunday morning, July 5, 2008, my mom was taken to hospital. I also went with her.

My mom went inside a room. I too wanted to go in, but was told to remain outside.

Soon my cousin Spencer and his mother also arrived there.

The following day my mom and my sweet little angel too got home.

Take all of them out then put one of them back in, but don't put it back in the same place in the sentence.

[RonBee]

"I am very grateful to God that he gave me such a beautiful fairy-like sister and had her come to this world just when my summer vacation was going to start so that I can play with her without having the worry about going to school next day..."

Try:

I am very grateful to God that he gave me such a beautiful fairy-like sister and had her come into this world just when my summer vacation was starting, so I can play with her without having to worry about going to school the next day.