[Essay] The Advantages of Extra-curricular Activities

[TwistedSister18]

The Advantages Of Extra-Curricular Activities
In some countries, the educational systems are only based on fixed curriculum with a number of books and learning materials that most people consider them as insufficient or restrictive for the student’s comprehension skills and imaginations. Although it is now believed that today’s the best educational systems constitute not only a curriculum but also extra-curricular social or cultural activities wcich have many advantages like increase in sociability, learning new things and better motivation for school, it is yet underestimated in some countries.

The first advantage of extra-curricular activities is the increase in sociability which is a crucial ability for personal development and an important criteria for job interviews. People’s ability to make friends or to become a part of a group fuels self-confidence and creates a better atmosphere of liability among people.
The second advantage of extra-curricular activities is learning new things. For instance, learning about cultural differences by becoming friends with people who are foreigners will create a better understanding of differences mutually. This also can be regarded as a perfect examination about their sociability
The third advantage of extra-curricular activities concerns better motivation for school. Due to the fact that people will spend some time on extra-curricular activities in addition to school works, as a result, they will feel motivated, emotionally better and ready to take the challenge of studying a variety of different subjects in school.
In conclusion, there are numerous advantages of participating in social, cultural and extra-curricular activities concerning sociability, the increase in people’s knowledge about new things and their motivation for the hardships of life. Hence, people should be encouraged to participate in activites which are different than their studies in order to create a better-adjusted, motivated societies.

[thedaffodils]

Hi! I am not a teacher.

I think you can replace "The first advantage of extra-curricular activities" with other words" in your writing. So you don't have to repeat these words again and again.

For example, I'd like to illustrate the advantages of extracurricular activities as below:

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[RonBee]

What is "an atmosphere of liability"?

(If you don't understand what you are saying then nobody will either.)