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[Nepal_Himalaya]

The Himalaya
Concealed in a citadel of ice known as third pole, accessed through beautifully cut narrow gorges drained in torrents and enclosed by vivid landscape, the Himalaya possess 14 highest peaks on the earth. Hundreds of other lesser known but spectacular peaks lie shoulder to shoulder with these over 8,000 m snow-giants. At the base, plateaus and forests of rhododendron are roved by Himalayan Bear, Mountain Sheep (Marcopolo's Sheep) and the illusive snow leopard. The Himalayas literally meaning the abode of snow, however was long ventured by ascetics. Here Buddhism and Hinduism synthesized with pagan practices are so inherent that even your high-altitude expedition will become an odyssey of history and culture.
Trekking in the Himalaya
Trekking is the best way to experience the beauty of the Himalaya. Basically trekking in the Himalaya is walking through fields and villages, along valleys and streams or up mountain slopes of the Himalaya with a local guide. The trekker carries a personal pack with camera, day clothing and snacks while their other equipments are supplied to everyday camp by porters. Accommodation and meals will be either arranged in family run teahouses or in portable tents carried by porters. Established routes of Annapurna, Everest and Langtang could be trekked by staying in decent family run teahouses and are known as ‘Teahouse Treks’. ‘Camping Treks’ on the other hand retain their own cooks, Sirdar (foreman) and porters and group camp in tents to move off the beaten trail’.

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[smithy928]

The best advice anyone can give is the old saying: "keep it simple, silly".
Put away the thesaurus and use simpler words, if every word has so many syllables it's distracting and sounds awkward read out loud. It seems as though you're trying too hard!

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The Himalaya
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Trekking in the Himalaya
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