Could you, please, check if I make sense

Hi everybody!

I have an assignment to write the article about hairdryers. Could you, please, check if I make sense in the following sentences? I appreciate your help.

1) Dry nozzle is one of the more popular hairdryer attachments among hairdressers. It has a flat tapered end and is essential for hairstyling.
2) Diffuser is a bell-shaped attachment with its narrow end clicking onto the nozzle of the hairdryer. Hairdryer diffuser passes a strong airflow through many sieve-like openings and breaks it into warm breeze.
3) Hairdryer manufacturers position diffusers as the attachment to create curls and body. While diffusers do create curls and body, even some skilled hairdressers can't make it.

Thanks in advance

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Originally Posted by changeling

Hi everybody!

I have an assignment to write the article about hairdryers. Could you, please, check if I make sense in the following sentences? I appreciate your help.

1) The Dry nozzle is one of the more popular hairdryer attachments among hairdressers. It has a flat tapered end and is essential for hairstyling.
2) The Diffuser is a bell-shaped attachment with its narrow end clicking onto the nozzle of the hairdryer. It causes a strong airflow to pass through many sieve-like openings, resulting in a warm breeze. (not sure breeze is the right word here)
3) Hairdryer manufacturers market diffusers as the attachment to create curls and body. While diffusers can assist in creating curls and body, it should be noted that even some skilled hairdressers cannot always achieve the best results/it's full potential.

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Corrections in blue.

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Originally Posted by changeling

I have an assignment to write the article about hairdryers. Could you, please, check if I make sense in the following sentences?

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I have an assignment to write an article about hairdryers. Would you please check to see if the following sentences make sense?

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