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balveer singh bhatnagar · #1 01-Sep-2008, 02:49

Suggest grammatical errors in th following text :
There are a number of planets, satellites, and comets, revolving, in this zero-shaped cosmos, which has been proved by many scholars with the evidences produced by them. The same have been highlighted along with different arguments; still the opinion about the universe has not yet been complete, final and clear. Many scholars expressed their opinion that there are a number of Suns alike, visible to us as stars and they revolve round a big Sun. Many scholars said that like that big Sun, which is related to our earth, many planets are revolving round some other Suns on their respective orbits; but as we are not fully capable to describe this infinite great cosmos leaving the details aside, we should precise to our purpose. Many scholars have described the sun, which is visible to us. It is solid like earth and has one or the other types of STRISTI. Some of the scholars considered that it is an illuminated ball of material like fog or fumes. Many described it as a ball of gas like light. But presently many scholars considered it that neither it has solidness nor it has any STASHTI. Those readers, who wish to go through more details, may refer any book on the universe; we would like to mention this much that, having about 8 lac 760 thousand miles of radius, a ball of fire which completes its orbit along with its planets and satellites in 25 days 8 hrs and 9 months.

**RonBee** · #2 01-Sep-2008, 03:38

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Originally Posted by balveer singh bhatnagar

There are a number of planets, satellites, and comets, revolving, in this zero-shaped cosmos,

There are a number of planets, satellites, and comets revolving in this zero-shaped cosmos.

Revolving around what?

balveer singh bhatnagar · #3 01-Sep-2008, 13:12

There are a number of planets, satellites, and comets, revolving in their orbits, in this zero-shaped cosmos, which has been proved by many scholars with the evidences produced by them. The same have been highlighted along with different arguments; still the opinion about the universe has not yet been complete, final and clear. Many scholars expressed their opinion that there are a number of Suns alike, visible to us as stars and they revolve round a big Sun. Many scholars said that like that big Sun, which is related to our earth, many planets are revolving round some other Suns on their respective orbits; but as we are not fully capable to describe this infinite great cosmos leaving the details aside, we should precise to our purpose. Many scholars have described the sun, which is visible to us. It is solid like earth and has one or the other types of STRISTI. Some of the scholars considered that it is an illuminated ball of material like fog or fumes. Many described it as a ball of gas like light. But presently many scholars considered it that neither it has solidness nor it has any STASHTI. Those readers, who wish to go through more details, may refer any book on the universe; we would like to mention this much that, having about 8 lac 760 thousand miles of radius, a ball of fire which completes its orbit along with its planets and satellites in 25 days 8 hrs and 9 months.

**RonBee** · #4 02-Sep-2008, 00:50

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Originally Posted by balveer singh bhatnagar

There are a number of planets, satellites, and comets, revolving in their orbit, in this zero-shaped cosmos, which has been proved by many scholars with the evidences produced by them.

There are a number of planets, satellites, and comets revolving around the sun.

**RonBee** · #5 02-Sep-2008, 00:53

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Originally Posted by balveer singh bhatnagar

Many scholars expressed their opinion that there are a number of Suns alike, visible to us as stars and they revolve round a big Sun.

Many scholars have expressed the opinion that there are a number of ordinary stars that revolve around a superbig star.

**RonBee** · #6 02-Sep-2008, 00:54

The word "precise" is not a verb.

**RonBee** · #7 02-Sep-2008, 00:55

Strive for clarity.

**RonBee** · #8 02-Sep-2008, 01:10

Please rewrite that so it is understandable. Make at least two paragraphs.

balveer singh bhatnagar · #9 04-Sep-2008, 02:38

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Originally Posted by RonBee

There are a number of planets, satellites, and comets revolving around the sun.

It changes the meaning altogether. It is not necessary that the planets, satellites and comets revolve aroun the sun. It is true for our solar system. But it is not necessary to mention that they have their own centeral star.

By the way it is a peace of translation from hindi text to english text. If you require I an send the original hindi text.

thanks, regards

**Anglika** · #10 04-Sep-2008, 14:23

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Originally Posted by balveer singh bhatnagar

There are a number of planets, satellites, and comets, revolving in their orbits, in this zero-shaped cosmos, which has been proved by many scholars with the evidences produced by them. Many scholars have produced evidence to show that there are planets and other celestial bodies, revolving in their orbits, in this zero-shaped cosmos.

The same have been highlighted along with different arguments; still the opinion about the universe has not yet been complete, final and clear.Despite the many different arguments and propositions presented, there is still no complete, final and clear opinion about the universe.

It really needs total re-writing to make sense.