help edit my essay about socialization

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The role of socialization
The process in which people especially children learn how to become human and to behave in a way that is acceptable in the society is called Socialization. We never stop learning how to behave, mainly because our society is always changing and we are continually faced with learning how to behave in new and different situations. When starting to look at the socialization process and the role of socialization, therefore, we can begin by answering the 2 questions below:
1. What makes us who we are?
2. Is it the genes we are born with? Or the environment in which we grow up?
However, with these two questions, many researchers and scientists are arguing in the topic of human development which a conflict is called, nature versus nurtures (or heredity versus environment). There is no difference in meaning between the two questions above. In fact, if we take bit closer look at these two contrasting ideas, we should appreciate that the heredity and environment factors interact and influence on the socialization process.
The example of the Environment, the impacts of isolation:
The case of Isabelle:
Being so deeply ashamed of Isabelle’s illegitimate birth, she was kept hidden away from the world. She had never had any contact with other people in the society, except her mother who could neither speaker nor hear. In 1938, at the age of six, the Ohio authorities discovered Isabelle. She couldn’t speak, and she was very frightened when seeing strange people, and she reacted like a wild animal. This is because that he had no contact with people in her society or we can say that she lost being socialized. Few years later, after being trained by specialized groups, Isabelle began to adapt to human relationship and socialization. Before Isabelle was at 9, she was able to attend school with other children, and she was doing well in class. By her 14th year, she was in sixth grade and was emotionally healthy and able to deal well with the problems of life. Without an opportunity to experience socialization, Isabelle could hardly become a human being, since she first discovered at the age of six.
Through the example of Isabelle, we can know how important of the early socialization for children is. Hence, early childhood is the period of the most crucial socialization. It is then that we acquire language and learn the fundamentals of our culture, and we now know that is not enough to care for infant’s physical needs, parents must also concern about the children social development.

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The role of socialization
The process in which people especially children learn how to become human and to behave in a way that is acceptable in the society is called Socialization. We never stop learning how to behave, mainly because our society is always changing and we are continually faced with learning how to behave in new and different situations. When starting to look at the socialization process and the role of socialization, therefore, we can begin by answering the two questions below:
1. What makes us who we are?
2. Is it the genes we are born with? Or the environment in which we grow up?
However, with these two questions, many researchers and scientists are arguing in the topic ofhuman development which a conflict is called, nature versus nurture (or heredity versus environment). ...are arguing about the role of nature versus nurture in human development ...
There is no difference in meaning between the two questions above. In fact, if we take bit a closer look at these two contrasting ideas, we should appreciate that the heredity and environment factors interact and influence that both have influence on the socialization process.
The example of the Environment, the impacts of isolation:
The case of Isabelle: The case of Isabelle is an example of the effects of isolation on development.
Being so deeply ashamed of Isabelle’s illegitimate birth, Her family being ashamed of Isabelle's illegitimacy, she was kept hidden away from the world. She had omit never had any contact with other people in the society, omit except her mother, who could neither speak nor hear. In 1938, at the age of six, the Ohio authorities discovered Isabelle. She couldn’t speak, and omit she was very frightened when seeing strange people, and she reacted like a wild animal. This is because that she had no contact with people in her society contact outside the family or we can say that she lost being socialized. A few years later, after being trained by specialized groups, Isabelle began to adapt to human relationship and socialization. Before Isabelle was at 9 nine years old/aged nine, she was able to attend school with other children, and she was doing well in class. By her 14th year, she was in sixth grade and was emotionally healthy and able to deal well with the problems of life. Without an opportunity to experience socialization, Isabelle could hardly become a human being, since when she first discovered at the age of six.
Through the example of Isabelle, we can know how important of see the importance of the early socialization for children is omit Hence, early childhood is the period of the most crucial socialization. It is then that we acquire language and learn the fundamentals of our culture, and we now know that is not enough to care for an infant’s physical needs; parents must also concern be concerned about the child's social development.

There is some confusion about the questions. At no point do you connect back to question 1. Perhaps a short para identifying what makes a person a human being would be valuable.