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"It was birthday of my sister last week, 21st October. Then, my parents and I met and we decided to give to her a party . She doesn't like party very much, so we thought about a surprised party.
It was pretty hot day, altough it was almost night. We organized my mother's house for the accomplishment of the party and invited all the family and her best friends.
While my mom and I were making the cake, my other sister brought the all things for the decoration. About the 6.00 P.M. we began to organize the room where would be the party. We decoreted with a lot of colorful balloons, especially pink balloons which is her favorite color. We also put on a strip written:"HAPPY BIRTHDAY, PRISCILA!" in front of the door.
She was studying at a friend's house. So, I called her and told her that a present has just arrived for her and she would have to come back home as soon as possible to see the present , because it was the most eccentric box that I have ever seen. She told me that she would be home about 8:00 P.M. Quickly, we finished the last preparations, we arranged the table with the cake and the candles, turned off the lights and we waited for her eagerly.
When she arrived and got into the room we shouted and wish for her a happy birthday. She was frightened, but she loved it!!! We were glad everything turned out all right."
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