please help me.

[Reemaa]

hi everyone i hope you all fain


i wrote a paragraph but i don't know is it correct or not


Hardworking

my brother works everyday with my father's company .
He works hard , he wakes up at 5 am and he go to work at 6am until 4pm .when he return home he changes his clothes quickly to go for playing footbool from 5 to 8 . when he return to home he is so tired and very angry , he doesn't anyone talk with him . he just eats while he watch tennis on tv , he likes tennis . After that he go to his bed at 10 pm .

please tell me is it correct or not
tomorrow i'll show it to my teacher

thanks

[Roselin]

Originally Posted by Reemaa

hi everyone i hope you all fain


i wrote a paragraph but i don't know it is correct or not


Hardworking

My brother works everyday at my father's company .
He works hard. He wakes up at 5 am and goes to work at 6 am.When he returns home, he changes his clothes quickly to go for playing footbool from 5 to 8 . When he comes back home, he is so tired and angry that he doesn't like to talk to anyone at home. He just have his meal while watching tennis on T.V.; he likes tennis ( or you can say he is fond of tennis). After that he goes to his bed at 10 pm .

please tell me is it correct or not
tomorrow i'll show it to my teacher

thanks

I am not a teacher..

[sarat_106]

You can try this one.

My brother works everyday in (with) my father's company .
he wakes up at 5 am, (and he) goes to work at 6am and works until 4pm .He works hard. When he returns home, he changes his clothes quickly to go for playing foot ball from 5 to 8pm. When he returns (to) home he is so tired that he gets (and) very angry easily. He doesn't like anyone to talk with him. He just eats while (he) watching tennis on TV, and he likes tennis . After that he goes to (his) bed at 10 pm.

Delete words in brackets which are not necessary.

[Reemaa]

thanks alooooooot

[Reemaa]

Originally Posted by Manas Ranjan Mallick

You can try this one.

My brother works everyday in (with) my father's company .
he wakes up at 5 am, (and he) goes to work at 6am and works until 4pm .He works hard. When he returns home, he changes his clothes quickly to go for playing foot ball from 5 to 8pm. When he returns (to) home he is so tired that he gets (and) very angry easily. He doesn't like anyone to talk with him. He just eats while (he) watching tennis on TV, and he likes tennis . After that he goes to (his) bed at 10 pm.

Delete words in brackets which are not necessary.

can i put ( he want every thing tidy )after He doesn't like anyone to talk with him.

sorry
thank you

[Roselin]

Originally Posted by Reemaa

can i put ( He wants everything neat and tidy. )after He doesn't like anyone to talk with him.

sorry
thank you

you can add the word neat also.

[Reemaa]

Thank you