Can you please look at these lyrics? thx

[mikko4]

Just another dream of mine

Whole my life I was waiting for

the damned moment,

That would let me live forever

But the moment didn’t come and never will

All my dreams have disappeared

But that’s what life is about

Your dreams may never come true

So you’d better start living and stop dreaming

Ch1:

Now I don’t dream any more.

I live for today.

I share what I’ve learned

I enjoy and sing

I say what I want to say

And I love everyone

Age of tales is over

What you need is a push in your face

The push that’ll make you see

It is never to late to change your life

Finally open your eyes and take a look

The truth lies in front of you

God cannot help you

You’re on your own

Ch2:

Now I see my reason to live.

From now on

I take a risk,

I drink,

I swear

And I never regret

Just want to know whether there are some words that you would change. and please feel free to write your personal opinion on this song.
This is the first time I've tried to write lyrics in english. I knnow it's not very original and breathtaking but so far it's the best that I can do.

Thank you all very much.

[Raymott]

Originally Posted by mikko4

Just another dream of mine

The Whole of my life I was waiting for

the damned moment,

That would let me live forever

But the moment didn’t come and never will

All my dreams have disappeared

But that’s what life is about

Your dreams may never come true

So you’d better start living and stop dreaming

Ch1:

Now I don’t dream any more.

I live for today.

I share what I’ve learned

I enjoy and sing

I say what I want to say

And I love everyone

The Age of tales is over

What you need is a push in your face [?]

The push that’ll make you see

It is never too late to change your life

Finally open your eyes and take a look

The truth lies in front of you

God cannot help you

You’re on your own

Ch2:

Now I see my reason to live.

From now on

I take a risk,

I drink,

I swear

And I never regret

Just want to know whether there are some words that you would change. and please feel free to write your personal opinion on this song.
This is the first time I've tried to write lyrics in english. I knnow it's not very original and breathtaking but so far it's the best that I can do.

Thank you all very much.

It's not bad. It's nice to see an original poem/song on the site, AND one that doesn't suck up to a god, or make you start dry wretching.

What does "a push in the face" mean to you? I'm not sure what it's meant to do; it's not an English idiom.

[eisa]

u have a smart vision as wellas feeling
go a head

[mikko4]

by "push in your face" I mean something like a hit in a face. when someone hits you in your face. I dont know what a noun should be ?(push, hit or punch ?)

thanks

[Raymott]

Originally Posted by mikko4

by "push in your face" I mean something like a hit in a face. when someone hits you in your face. I dont know what a noun should be ?(push, hit or punch ?)

thanks

punch

[mikko4]

OK thanks