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How can I rewrite the following passage smoothly and has more interesting word choice.

Every Saturday night we go to my grandparents’ for dinner. It's a tradition to have pizza. Grandma makes the pizza crust before we get there. When we get there, we help put on the toppings. Grandma is very generous. She knows we love pizza. She makes three large ones for the seven of us. I like the pepperoni and mushroom pizza best. I tend to overeat because it is so good.
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Every Saturday night we go to my grandparents’ for dinner. It's a tradition to have pizza. Grandma makes the pizza crust before we get there. Then when we arrive, we help put on the toppings. Grandma is very generous because she knows we love pizza. She makes three large ones for the seven of us. I like the pepperoni and mushroom pizza best. I tend to overeat because it is so delicious.
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