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webdweller · #11 26-Dec-2008, 08:47

My final question, do you really fully understand all of my ideas and descriptions in the writing? Is there any word or sentence that is too obscure?

Thank you very much?

**RonBee** · #12 26-Dec-2008, 10:15

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Originally Posted by webdweller

:D Well can you ask a little more clearly? Actually I don't understand this question of yours?

I meant to say, "How did you get your cats to eat rice?" (I have since changed that.)

**RonBee** · #13 26-Dec-2008, 10:25

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Originally Posted by webdweller

Thank you for your suggestions. Are those all the changes that you think are necessary?

Frankly, I'm somewhat surprised at how little the passage needed to be changed. In writing this passage for review by other people in this forum, I tried to experiment with many new words, phrases, sentence structures and usages that I DEEM appropriate and idiomatic (based on my sense of English) but don't know for sure if in English, they are acceptable or not. They include: "sliding door," "meowed loudly and repeatedly," "a demonstration for food," "put into the fridge for preservation," "shovel the food to both sides to create a "buffer zone" which had no food" (<-- Do you really understand this description?) and "both of them saying in one voice."

Are all the usages above correct and idiomatic?

You didn't need "a demonstration for food" because it would soon be obvious what the cats were hollering for. (Say speak with one voice.) You made some good choices. All in all it's not bad. (Anybody who has lived with a cat will understand it.)

I wouldn't say it's a rambling writing. It's quite coherent.