[General] Animal Farm

[thod00]

Yes, its in the wrong place. It should be over in the 'Editing and Writing' section where people expect to find long essays. Even there it would be better to post a smaller sample so that people dont have to spend too long on one piece.

The people here are giving up their time for free and it is not polite to ask too much from them all at once. I could spend 30 mins or an hour rewriting you essay, but then I am doing your homework and not you. You stand a much better chance of getting a reply if you keep it short.

[RonBee]

Originally Posted by EMAIL REMOVED - Send PM to This User Instead

He must have a fertile imagination to write such a story.

Say:

He must have had a fertile imagination to have written such a story.

Get to work!

[RonBee]

Originally Posted by EMAIL REMOVED - Send PM to This User Instead

All around the world happen, everyday, such inexplicable situations which remind to the affected population of the unpredictable nature of life. In fact, it is impossible to control everything progression, especially when this thing is destiny.

That makes no sense. You need to rewrite (or delete) that paragraph. Do you understand that?

[Charlie Bernstein]

everyday = ordinary
every day = at least once in every 24-hour period