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Old 06-Dec-2004, 05:04
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This semester I took the ESL class in College of San Jose. It’s a writing skills class designed to give student practice in sentence mechanics, structure, and composition. In this class, I learned how to using grammar in English and being an active reader. Also I learned how to write essay, summary, and response. I have done so many activities in this class, such as reading, writing, proofreading, group work, and class discussing. I enjoyed this class a lot because it was very interesting, and it really improved my reading and writing skills. In fact, reading, POV, and class discussing were the most helpful parts in this ESL for me, because they made me feel more comfortable about writing in English.
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Old 06-Dec-2004, 08:35
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> ESL class in College of San Jose
in -> at the

> how to using grammar in English and being
how to use grammar in English and how to be
'how to using' is incorrect, and then you have to change 'being' to agree with 'use'
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Old 06-Dec-2004, 19:52
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thanks
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Old 07-Dec-2004, 00:46
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Default Re: can i change some sentence to make this intro paragraph better?

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This semester I took the ESL class in College of San Jose. It’s a writing skills class designed to give student practice in sentence mechanics, structure, and composition.
AintFoolin is right. Change in College of San Jose to at the College of San Jose. Also, change student to students.

[QUOTE=kkche]In this class, I learned how to using grammar in English and being an active reader.[QUOTE=kkche]

As AintFoolin said, it should be "how to use grammar...be an active reader".

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Also I learned how to write essay, summary, and response.
Say:
Also, I learned how to write essays, summaries, and responses.
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Originally Posted by kkche
I have done so many activities in this class, such as reading, writing, proofreading, group work, and class discussing.
Better:
I have participated in many activities in that class, such as reading, writing, proofreading, group work, and class discussions.
Quote:
Originally Posted by kkche
I enjoyed this class a lot because it was very interesting, and it really improved my reading and writing skills.
Change this to the.

Quote:
Originally Posted by kkche
In fact, reading, POV, and class discussing were the most helpful parts in this ESL for me, because they made me feel more comfortable about writing in English.
Change change discussing to class discussions.

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amazing how much stuff i missed lol
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Old 09-Dec-2004, 00:46
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amazing how much stuff i missed lol
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Change change discussing to class discussions.
Clearly, that was a goof. It should have been:
Change class discussing to class discussions.

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