correct this short essay

[tareq10]

English is very important. Since it is considered the first language in the world due to its wide spread and use, it should be learnt to facilitate our life. It is not only spoken by people but also it is implied as a mean to deal with. In other ways, it is the language of computers, electronics and other science and technologies.
English language has four main skills which are, reading, writing, speaking and listening.

Reading is the first thing beginners should start with. There are many
Useful books of English containing simple ways of introducing topics from the very beginning. If you are a non native speaker of English try the ones illustrated
in your language, they would be more useful if you didn't have a good command of English.
Once you have collected and kept in mind as many information as needed you should write down examples of your own memory and go over them in your mind.
Speaking and listening are crucial moment in your life, but it's not as difficult as you think unless you have a great amount of knowledge about the English grammar.

Finally, English language is of great value especially in your daily life to keep in touch with others and friends. Never get tired from searching and asking questions to improve your skills, instead depend on yourself through reading and surfing the net especially our privileged website.

could you tell me how good my writing is?
could you tell me how good my grammar is ?

[Jamalmemon]

English is very important language. Since it is considered as the first language in the world due to its wide spread and use, it should be learnt to (facilitate our life) to get advantage. It is not only spoken by people but also it is implied as a mean to deal with. In other ways, It is the language of computers, electronics and other science and, technologies.

English language has four main skills which are(,) reading, writing, speaking and, listening.

The Reading is the first thing with the beginners should start (with). There are many
Useful english books (of English) containing simple ways of introducing topics from the very (beginning) Basic. If you are not a (non) native speaker of English try the ones illustrated in your language, they would be more useful if you (didn't) don`t have a good command of English.
Once you have collected and kept in mind as many information as needed you should write down examples of your own (memory). go over them in your mind.Speaking and listening are crucial moment in your life, but it's not as difficult as you think unless you have a great amount of knowledge about the English grammar.

Finally, English language has great worth(is of great value) especially in your daily life to keep in touch with the friends and others. Never get (tired) fadeup from searching and asking questions to improve your skills, instead just depending on yourself through reading and surfing the net especially our privileged website.

Thanks Correct me too if I`m wrong.
In Red are only my opnions.
i think there is mistake in structure.keep on practising.

[thod00]

That markup is awful.

[tareq10]

That markup is awful.

hi..! thod00 how r u?
I think i'm not mistaken. what do you say!

[RonBee]

Say:

widespread use
our lives
It is the language of computers, electronics, science and technology.

Perhaps:

Learning English can help us achieve our goals.

[RonBee]

Say:

There are many useful books of English containing simple ways of introducing topics.
If you are a non-native speaker of English, try the ones written both in English and in your language. Those books will be more useful if you don't have a good command of English.

[tareq10]

That markup is awful.

what do you mean?

[tareq10]

Say:

widespread use
our lives
It is the language of computers, electronics, science and technology.

Perhaps:

Learning English can help us achieve our goals.

what about the rest of the paragraph?
is it ok?

[RonBee]

what about the rest of the paragraph?
is it ok?

Well, "Reading is the first thing beginners should start with" should be: "Beginners should start with reading." (It says the same thing with fewer words.)

How about rewriting it (and reposting it) using the suggestions you find useful? Then I will tell you what still needs improving.

[tareq10]

Well, "Reading is the first thing beginners should start with" should be: "Beginners should start with reading." (It says the same thing with fewer words.)

How about rewriting it (and reposting it) using the suggestions you find useful? Then I will tell you what still needs improving.

I'M looking for a complicated language which is more beautiful and expressive rather than the simble one.