Does this article sound good in English ?

[RoseSpring]

I hav e translated this passage from Arabic into english and I want to know whether it sounds good or not in English ?

Thanks in Advance

When gold turns into stone!

It is said that one of the rich merchants left all what he had to his sons when he grew older. The sons promised to take full care of him, and they kept their promise for a while. Then, they started to neglect their father little by little, till their hearts were hardened and became as rocks, and they began to dress and feed him unwillingly.

When the father received such kind of treatment from his sons, he regretted what he had offered them. The father continued, however, to suffer so dearly until, one day, some of his friends paid their huge debt back; a debt that he had nearly lost hope of having it back. Then, the father brought a solid box and put the debt inside it.

No sooner had the sons discovered about the debt, when they started once again to respect their father and understand his feelings in order to give up the rest of his fortune. But, the father had learned the lesson, and gave them nothing at all.

After his death, the sons opened the box hastily, but there was no money, instead, they found stones inside, and a note saying: "Allah (God) does turn gold into stone for disobedient sons ". In fact, the father decided to donate the money to an orphanage, as his sons had treated him so badly, and he filled the box with stones!

[RoseSpring]

Why there is not any reply ? is it that bad ?!!!!!!!!!!!!

[susiedqq]

It is said that a rich merchant left all that he had to his sons when he grew older. The sons promised to take full care of him, and they kept their promise for a while. Then, they started to neglect their father little by little, till their hearts were hardened and became as rocks, and they began to dress and feed him unwillingly.

When the father received this kind of treatment from his sons, he regretted what he had offered them. The father continued, however, to suffer dearly until, one day, some of his friends paid back their huge debt, a debt that he had nearly lost hope of ever seeing paid. Then, the father brought a solid box and put the money inside.



No sooner had the sons discovered the money, when they started once again to respect their father and treat him kindly, so that one day he would give up the rest of his fortune.


After his death, the sons opened the box hastily, but found no money. Instead, they found stones and a note saying: "Allah (God) turns gold into stone for disobedient sons." In fact, the father had decided to donate the money to an orphanage since his sons had treated him so badly, and he had filled the box with stones!

[RoseSpring]

Thanks for help indeed.