5. a) It was very strange that only 14-year-old girls were allowed in.
b) It was strange that 14-year-old girls were allowed in only.
Which of these two sentences would you prefer?
Use a)- b) is wrong- 'only' doesn't work there.
7. 2,000,000 more people (or another 2,000,000 people) are said to have been transferred to the freshly (recently, newly…) built cities.
Use
recently/newly.
Freshly is used with
painted.
9. I think your mum will do her nut when she knows you’ve transferred the cake to this plate.
I'd change
transferred- it doesn't fit with the colloquial langauge- use
moved.
10. I emphasized in my report that it was very important to children to stay calm under any circumstances.
I think you might mean
for children.
To children means that it was the children's own ealuation of the importance.
13. Lack of cheap tickets was putting potential customers off.
I'd say
the shortage
17. Seeing as it’s you who have earned all this money, you can buy whatever you want on them.
I'd say
has
The garage had us over a barrel because they were the only people in town who could fix the car.
