could someone take a look at my pre-writing

[miatech]

guys could someone take a look at my pre-writing and make some suggestion.

Pre-Write

Bill Gates’ Impact on my Life

1 Ideas:
1-Do I like Bill Gates or Not?
2-Bill Gates’ influence on my work day
3-Microsoft Office’s impact on my work (Word, Excel, PowerPoint, etc)
4-Email clients and calendars (Microsoft Outlook vs Thunderbird and others)
5-Exchange Server vs other Mail Servers
6-Windows or Macs
7-Linux vs Windows
8-Web development and internet (Apache vs IIS)
9-Internet Explorer vs Firefox (browser wars)
10-ASP or PHP(web dev)
11-Standard applications in my everyday life
12-Microsoft Office or Google Apps
13-Bill Gates’ impact on my work life (better or for worst)
14- Bill Gates and everyday IT (evolution)
15- A Computer in every desk
16- Maintenance of servers at work
17- Automation of software and apps
18- Is Microsoft a monopoly?
19- Bill Gate’s Antitrust (US v. Microsoft)
20- Bill Gates’ monopoly coming down in recent years

2 Grouping
Paragraph 1: 1, 2, 3, 11, 12, 13
Paragraph 2: 4, 5
Paragraph 3: 6, 7
Paragraph 4: 8, 9, 10
Paragraph 5: 14, 15, 16, 17
Paragraph 6: 18, 19, 20

3 Main Ideas for Paragraphs
Paragraph 1: Bill Gates’ influence on my work day.
Paragraph 2: How Microsoft communication application compare to others
Paragraph 3: The Operating System war, how Windows stacks against MAC and Linux.
Paragraph 4: Is Internet Explorer better than Firefox? How Microsoft’s web server compares to other server like Apache from Linux.
Paragraph 5: How Bill Gates has changed Information Technology and IT Support in the past 10 years and the effects on my professional life.
Paragraph 6: Microsoft is a monopoly and some of its downfalls.

4 Thesis:
Bill Gates has change the way I do computing in my everyday life.

Thanks
-JV

[Anglika]

I would move your heading on "Do I like Bill Gates?" to the end to be a part of your ending summary.