audience benefits and the you view

[rc1970]

My task is to Revise the following sentences to emphasize the perspective of the audience and the “you” view.



a. To avoid suffering the kinds of monetary losses we have experience in the past, our credit union prohibits the cashing of third party checks presented by our members.
b. To help us process your order with our new database software, we need you to go to this Web site and fill out the required customer information.
c. We regret to announce that our electronics center is able to honor iPhone discounts only for a limited initial offering during the next 30 days.
d. Under a new policy, reimbursement of travel expense will be restricted to those related to work only.
e. We are pleased to announce that you have been approved to enroll in our management trainee program.
f. To allow us to continue our policy of selling name brands at the discount prices, we can give store credit but we cannot give cash refund on returned merchandise.

[Raymott]

My task is to Revise the following sentences to emphasize the perspective of the audience and the “you” view.

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