Anyone can check the poem below if it has any mistake ?
The Heaven
What's that to me if the end of the world will come
If the way of the life will finish,i want it now
I have no fright,i am happy
I loved the love with you in my lifetime
The name of the lines on my face is you
You are the reason of my every breath
If i come to the world again my darling,
I look for you,i love you again
I don't change the heaven instead of your hairwire
I love you as long as i live
I found some mistakes. you didn't use capaital I
I have no fright- I'd use 'fear' here.
Volcano asked:
Anyone can check the poem below if it has any mistake ?
If I come to the world again, my darling,
I'll look for you,I'll love you again,
I won't change the heaven instead of your hairwire,
I will love you as long as i live...
What's hairwire? (I know what going haywire means, but hairwire???)
Nice poem.
/bianca