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Old 21-Sep-2004, 05:55
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Hello,

The symptoms may differ from person to person. Not everyone will have all the same symptoms. Some people experience a few symptoms and some many symptoms. The severity of symptoms also varies with individuals.

Any suggestions to abridge the above paragraph?
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Old 21-Sep-2004, 08:00
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Originally Posted by Abusaad
Hello,

The symptoms may differ from person to person. Not everyone will have all the same symptoms. Some people experience a few symptoms and some many symptoms. The severity of symptoms also varies with individuals.

Any suggestions to abridge the above paragraph?

The symptoms vary from one person to another in their intensity, number and severity.
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Old 21-Sep-2004, 10:09
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Thanks Natalie27. Excellent suggestion.
Anyone else, please?
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Old 21-Sep-2004, 12:33
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Natalie27's sentence is excellent IMO.
One could save a few words, if that matters, with:
The symptoms, and their severity, are patient dependent.
You lose information; but I think it keeps the core meaning.

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