Slogan for Internet Banking
My friend wrote a slogan for the internet banking of a bank which goes like this:
"TOO BUSY TO BE IN LINE, JUST A CLICK YOU'LL BE ON LINE"
She wants it to rhyme. Does it sound OK? I feel the words "IN LINE" do not quite carry the meaning of being in the queue.
I feel the slogan need to be modified like this:-
"TOO BUSY TO JOIN THE LINE, JUST CLICK AND YOU'LL BE ON LINE"
Does the word "THE LINE" indicate being in the queue? How does it differ from the former?
Your comment is highly appreciated and do you have any suggestion so that it carry the same meaning.