Hi Zorro
I checked your blog- and, considering English is not your native language, I think you are certainly on the right lines here
I think you would benefit from asking specific questions when you're unsure, as this will help more than asking advice on large chunks of writing
I would recommend you read around and see how others have formulated their sentences and paragraphs
I would suggest that when making an alternative point (i.e. but/however), that you start a new paragraph- as this is 'traditional' within English texts, and is widely accepted as a 'norm'
I think you have potential, and don't sell yourself short
Keep up the good work!
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