Expansion of Idea - Kill two birds in one stone

[mindovermatter]

[This idiom originated from a Chinese saying which literally translated meant – “one stone two birds”. This saying means that we should strive to achieve two goals in a single effort. In today’s world we have a truck load of work to do and very limited time. We are all struggling to keep our heads above the water regardless of the mounting pulls of gravity towards a life in which we are at a threat to be trampled over by the progressing crowd. In such a situation if we complete more work with less effort by engaging our effort wisely we con not only keep our head above the water but also swim towards progress.]
Please give your feedback on this piece and any improvement ideas.
Thankyou

[Frank Antonson]

[This idiom originated from a Chinese saying which literally translated meant – “one stone two birds”. This saying means that we should strive to achieve two goals in a single effort. In today’s world we have a truck load of work to do and very limited time. We are all struggling to keep our heads above the water regardless of the mounting pulls of gravity towards a life in which we are at a threat to be trampled over by the progressing crowd. In such a situation if we complete more work with less effort by engaging our effort wisely we con not only keep our head above the water but also swim towards progress.]
Please give your feedback on this piece and any improvement ideas.
Thankyou

You have quite a mixed metaphor there with "swimming" "gravity" and "trampled". Also, I think you are using "progress" first as a bad think and then second as a good thing. You should start a new sentence after "effort", and "can" is spelled wrong.
Still, I liked the piece.

[yeecharles]

The preposition in the idiom is incorrect.It should be 'with' instead of 'in'.

The whole thing should read as:
'Kill two birds with one stone'

[Gillnetter]

[This idiom originated from a Chinese saying which literally translated meant – “one stone two birds”. This saying means that we should strive to achieve two goals in a single effort. In today’s world we have a truck load of work to do and a very limited time to do it in.
This may seem a bit philosophical, but people today have the same number of hours (24) in a day, as did people in the 17th Century.

We are all struggling to keep our heads above the water regardless of the mounting pulls of gravity towards a life in which we are at a threat to be trampled over by the progressing crowd.
It is not "the water", it is "water". Water is an uncountable noun.
Gravity is a natural force - gravity does not pull one toward a life, it is a force that pulls things down.
to trample means to go over something. It is redundant to write - trampled over.
"the progressing crowd" doesn't make much sense here, unless you want it to mean the crowd that is moving forward.

In such a situation if we complete more work with less effort by engaging our efforts wisely, we con can not only keep our head above the water but also swim towards progress.]
Please give your feedback on this piece and any improvement ideas.
Thankyou

I am a bit confused. Are you saying that by working wisely we can attain something better than what we have now? Is progress better, even if it causes us to work more?

[depontes]

The correct idiom is: Kill two birds WITH one stone.

[Frank Antonson]

You know, ever since when I was a kid I wondered about this idiom in that why would you want to kill even ONE bird with a stone?
The imagery just doesn't work for me.

[mindovermatter]

I am a bit confused. Are you saying that by working wisely we can attain something better than what we have now? Is progress better, even if it causes us to work more?

I am saying that by working wisely we can attain something "more" not better. It is a quantitative not qualitative comparison.
And yes progress is better and important even if it causes more work.

[mindovermatter]

How aboutt this---

This idiom originated from a Chinese saying which literally translated meant – “one stone two birds”. This saying means that we should strive to achieve two goals in a single effort. In today’s world we have a truck load of work to do and a very limited time to do it in. We are all struggling to keep our heads above the water regardless of the weight on our shoulders. If we do not use our time and efforts wisely we will be left behind. In such a situation if we complete more work with less effort by engaging our effort wisely we can not only keep our head above the water but also progress towards our goals.

[Gillnetter]

How aboutt this---

This idiom originated from a Chinese saying which literally translated meant means – “one stone two birds”. This saying means that we should strive to achieve two goals in a single effort. In today’s world we have a truck load of work to do and a very limited time to do it in. We are all struggling to keep our heads above the water regardless of the weight on our shoulders. If we do not use our time and efforts wisely we will be left behind. In such a situation if we complete more work with less effort, by engaging our efforts wisely, we can not only keep our heads above the water but also progress towards our goals.

1. Meant is the past form of mean. I mean this now, I meant this yesterday.
2. A truck load of work, while understandable, just doesn't fit in with the rest of the text.
3. It's not the water, it's water.
4. The weight on our shoulders is used too often. The term for a phrase that is overused is trite.

[mindovermatter]

Thanks a lot. My expansion of idea is now much better.