Kindly help me to correct the grammar

[new2grammar]

Unbounded spell of love & warmth
Wraps around you

Let the magic of blanket wraps around you
that weaves a spell of love & peace

These above sentences are for Christmas Wishes
Please let me know if they are correct grammatically

Thanks

 

[new2grammar]

Unbounded spell of love & warmth
Wraps around you

Let the magic of blanket wraps around you
that weaves a spell of love & peace

These above sentences are for Christmas Wishes
Please let me know if they are correct grammatically

Thanks

Please someone help me with this

Thanks

 

[Rover_KE]

It's not easy to help with this kind of poetic language which the average native speaker would not use or expect the recipient of such sentiments to accept with equanimity.

You surely know that no sentence can be grammatical without a concluding punctuation mark.

More grammatical would be 'May unbounded spells of love and warmth surround you'.

I'm not sure how to improve your second sentence.

Rover

 

[5jj]

I'm not sure how to improve your second sentence.

"May you be wrapped in a magic banket woven from spells of peace and love" ?

I agree with Rover that the average native speaker (of British English) would not use such language.

 

[new2grammar]

Thanks for your reply

I would just like to know if this approach of writing make sense or for native speaker it's bad taste of writing.
So I can really improve upon it

Please advice

Thanks

 

[Rover_KE]

Thanks for your reply.

I would just like to know if this approach of writing make sense or for native speakers it's bad taste of writing,
so I can really improve upon it.

Please advise.

You are still not using punctuation correctly.


It's not in bad taste, but to be honest, if I wrote that on my Christmas cards my friends would fall about laughing.

I wouldn't want that to happen to you.

Rover

 

[emsr2d2]

If you are writing to a native English speaker, I would stick to the standard "Merry Christmas and Happy New Year". You can add a nice personal message like "I wish you peace and happiness for the future".

Honestly, if I received a Christmas message containing your original writing, I would think my friend had perhaps taken a perfectly nice poem in their own language and then tried to use Google Translate to turn it into rather bad English.