[Essay] About a opening keynote

[lynma]

Here's the case:

Our company is organizing a VIP reception in which our CEO need to make a speech at first.

The transcript of the opening keynote that I draft is as follows in blue:

Dear Friends and supporters of Chinese Basketball,

Welcome and thank you for joining us today!

It is certainly an honor to be gathering again with our noble guests on such a wonderful night of basketball. This is my very pleasant and cheerful time of a year at which I can see some old Chinese friends and get to know several new partners.

I hereby proudly inform you, my friends, that it’s been 10 years long since our collaboration with CBA started in 2005, which had been proved a very successful decision not only for the mutual benefit but what’s more, for the development of Chinese basketball as well.

Last year I was told that in Chinese the pronunciation of “9” equals long-lasting. This year they say the number “10” is even more meaningful as it is usually used as a symbol of perfection and completion. I believe our partnerships will be surely getting more extension alongside with coming closer to a full mark.

The advancement of the CBA league in recent years firmly convinced me of the bright future of China’s sports industry. I hope we can establish more partnerships all across the industry.

Now please allow me to propose a toast to everyone in attendance here and a fantastic basketball game tonight.

Please help revise and many thanks!

 

[Tarheel]

I believe the term you are looking for is ​keynote speech.

Here's the case:

Our company is organizing a VIP reception in which our CEO need to make a speech at first.

The transcript of the opening keynote that I draft is as follows in blue:

Dear Friends and supporters of Chinese basketball,

Welcome, and thank you for joining us today!

It is certainly an honor to be gathering again with our notable guests on such a wonderful night of basketball. This is my very pleasant and cheerful time of a year at which I can see some old Chinese friends and get to know several new partners.

I hereby proudly inform you, my friends, that it’s been 10 years [STRIKE]long[/STRIKE] since our collaboration with CBA started in 2005, and it has proved to be a very successful venture not only for the mutual benefit but what’s more, for the development of Chinese basketball as well.

For whose mutual benefit?

 

[lynma]

I believe the term you are looking for is ​keynote speech.

For whose mutual benefit?

For our company and its marketing parnter, CBA (Chinese Basketball Association).

 

[Tarheel]

For our company and its marketing partner, CBA (Chinese Basketball Association).

Why not include that in the speech? (It's not very long.)

 

[lynma]

Why not include that in the speech? (It's not very long.)

How do you find if I put it in this way that "not only for the benefit of our company and CBA..."

 

[Tarheel]

How do you find if I put it in this way that "not only for the benefit of our company and CBA..."

Say:

not only for the benefit of our company and CBA, but also....
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Or just say whatever makes you happy.
;-)