[Grammar] Our company established in 2011

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Would you mind helping me to check out these below sentences? Thanks in advance.

Our company established in 2011, we have a 2,000 square meter building of modern architecture with laboratory and offices in Zhongguancun Science Park in Beijing. Our pilot plant is located 10 km south of Gu’an town on National Highway 106, it is about an hour's drive from Beijing office. In addition, we invest almost $20 million to build a GMP factory in Dezhou, Shandong Province, it is about three hours to drive from Beijing, set off from Beijing south station and arrive in Denzhou East station in just over an hour via high-speed train with CRH. The first phase of the project is currently under construction, should be completed by the end of this year, it occupies an area of 100,000 square meters, with two dosage form manufacturing workshop, two pilot and six API manufacturing workshop, total construction area is more than 50,000 square meters.

Since its inception, we have been the sole and reliable manufacturer and exporter of bulk drugs, drugs intermediates and speciality chemicals. We manufacture our own brands as well as under neutral labels as required by the buyers.

Our Clear motto is satisfying the needs of our Customers.
 
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I think 'was' is missing before 'established' in the title, but I am not a teacher.
 

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Established in 2011, [STRIKE]we have [/STRIKE] our company occupies a 2,000 square meter building of modern architecture with laboratory and offices in Zhongguancun Science Park in Beijing.

I do not undertand the part on 'set off from Beijing' and 'arrive at another city'.
 

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I do not undertand the part on 'set off from Beijing' and 'arrive at another city'.
I take it to mean that it takes over an hour to travel from Beijing to Denzhou by high-speed train, but I am not a teacher.
 

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Our pilot plant is located 10 km south of Gu’an town on National Highway 106,[STRIKE] it is[/STRIKE] about an hour's drive from Beijing office.

In addition, we
are investing (since the project is in progress) almost $20 million to build a GMP factory in Dezhou, Shandong Province, [STRIKE]it is [/STRIKE]about three hours' [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] drive from Beijing.

It (Dezhou) is set off from Beijing south station and arrive in Denzhou East station in just over an hour via high-speed train with CRH.

"Set off from Beiing" and "arrive in Dengzhou" doesn't make sense in the sentence to describe the location of Dezhou.You could just say: ...Dezhou which is three hours' drive from Beijing and just over a hour ride on the high-speed train ([STRIKE]with[/STRIKE] on the CRH?).

What does CRH stand for?
 

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The first phase of the project is currently under construction(,) and should be completed by the end of this year. It occupies an area of 100,000 square meters, with two dosage form manufacturing workshop, two pilot workshops and six API manufacturing workshops. The[STRIKE] total construction[/STRIKE] gross floor area is more than 50,000 square meters.

Since [STRIKE]its[/STRIKE] inception, we have been the sole and reliable(1) manufacturer and exporter of bulk drugs, drugs intermediates and speciality chemicals. We manufacture our own brands as well as under neutral labels as required by the buyers.

Our [STRIKE]Clear[/STRIKE] motto is "satisfying the needs of our customers".

1. What do you mean by 'sole manufacturer'? Are you the sole manufacturer in the city/province/country?
Claiming to be reliable needs testimonies and track record and not just saying it yourself.
2. We manufacture under neutral labels - doesn't seem right.
 

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Dezhou which is three hours' drive from Beijing and just over a hour ride on the high-speed train ([STRIKE]with[/STRIKE] on the CRH?).
Denzhou is three hours' drive or just over an hour's ride on a CRH high-speed train from Beijing.

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Denzhou is three hours' drive or just over an hour's ride on a CRH high-speed train from Beijing.

Not a teacher.

Notice the '...'? It was meant to be the continuation of the sentence which I didn't type out in full.
 

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Did you notice that 'a hour' had been replaced by 'an hour'?
 

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No, I know I am quite careless at checking.
 

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tedmc and Matthew Wai, Thanks for your help.
 

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My two cents. There is nothing wrong with claiming to be reliable, but being the sole manufacturer or exporter of something is either true or it isn't.

Also, try:

Our motto is that we satisfy the needs of our customers. (Not very original, but there's nothing wrong with it.)

You two (Matthew and tedmec) have done quite well with this one.

(Drugs.com is a good source for anything about drugs.)

:)
 
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Claiming yourself to be reliable is like blowing your own trumpet, no?
This varies according to culture of course, Asians tend to be more modest when talking about their achievements.
When you talk about being the sole manufacturer or exporter of something, I think you should qualify that by stating the coverage.
The company motto/tagline/slogan/catchphrase which is part of the company's image should be stated verbatim.
 
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Established in 2011, [STRIKE]we have [/STRIKE] our company occupies a 2,000 square meter building


Also, it can probably say our company established in 2011, occupies a 2,000 square meter building. There is no difference, though.

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This varies according to culture of course, Asians tend to be more modest when talking about their achievements.
The people in the OP's country might be modest, but I don't think the companies there behave likewise.

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... our company established in 2011, occupies a 2,000 square meter building.
I would put a comma after 'company' and hyphenate '2,000-square-meter', but I am not a teacher.
 

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You cannot say 'our company established in 2011'.
A company is established by people, it doesn't establish by itself.
 

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You cannot say 'our company established in 2011'.
If a comma is put after 'company', it will mean 'our company, (which was) established in 2011, occupies...', where 'which was' can be omitted.
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Claiming yourself to be reliable is like blowing your own trumpet, no?
If the teachers here said that their answers were reliable, would you think that they were blowing their own trumpet?
 
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