A Hindi Movie: Secret Superstar

[Gaya87]

Hi, can someone please check the following sentences? Thank you.

Long synopsis
Insia is a teenage girl who very passionate about singing but she belongs to a very conservative family. Her father doesn't let her develop her talent but her mother secretly lets her follow her passion for singing. She begins anonymously posting her songs over the Youtube channel and gains nationwide fame including the attention of Shakti Kumar, a talented singer and music director. Insia embarks on an exciting journey that changes her life and the lives of everyone around her.

Short synopsis
Insia is a teenage girl who has always dreamed of becoming a famous singer. With harsh resistance from her father, she then decides to achieve her dream by posting videos on social media anonymously.

 

[tedmc]

Hi, can someone please check the following sentences? Thank you.

Long synopsis
Insia is a teenage girl who is very passionate about singing but she belongs to a very conservative family. Her father doesn't let her develop her talent but her mother secretly lets her follow her passion for singing. She begins by anonymously posting her songs [STRIKE]over[/STRIKE] on the Youtube channel and gains nationwide fame including the attention of Shakti Kumar, a talented singer and music director. Insia embarks on an exciting journey (what journey? as a singer?) that changes her life and the lives of everyone around her.

Short synopsis
Insia is a teenage girl who has always dreamed of becoming a famous singer. With harsh resistance from her father, she then decides to achieve her dream by posting videos on the social media anonymously.

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[Gaya87]

(what journey? as a singer?)

Yes, journey as a singer.

Can I say:

Soon Insia embarks on an exciting journey as a singer that changes her life entirely.